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Will Rhyme
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since 2006-05-22

Posts 149

0 posted 2006-05-23 01:31 AM

I've said I was a dreamer
I live where shadows dwell.
I chase the thing that is not there
(If caught, it would not tell?)

In misty morning fog,
I don't have to see,
that other side, where people rave
about reality!

Through moon-less sultry nights.
I hardly feel their stare
...the ones who've passed, here, long ago...
awaiting for me there.

This world has been no friend of mine
...a silent screaming moan.
small comfort that I know they wait
for me to come back home.

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

1 posted 2006-05-23 02:10 AM

There is grief in these verses mixed with anger and maybe futility? I can only bring my own interpretation to the words and a sense of compassion for these feelings.

Klassy

Will Rhyme
Member

since 2006-05-22

Posts 149

2 posted 2006-05-23 02:18 AM

You are, most certainly, right.

Thank You for the comments.
Will

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2006-05-23 07:15 AM

you are becoming a favorite of mine! Love this!

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2006-05-23 09:58 AM

"Through moon-less sultry nights.
I hardly feel their stare
...the ones who've passed, here, long ago...
awaiting for me there."

this has weight to it...and texture...
I enjoyed

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2006-05-23 10:50 AM

A gripping excellent write Will.
Well done!
Hugs~N

~ Trace my body with your words,
in doing so, you touch my heart ~

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

6 posted 2006-05-23 12:48 PM

This sent shivers right up my soine...ghosts looking over my shoulder as I read....

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

7 posted 2006-05-23 06:23 PM

An enjoyable read. Welcome to Pips!
And may those ghosts keep that quill quivering.

Debo
Member

since 2006-04-18

Posts 321
Texas U.S.A.

8 posted 2006-06-04 03:10 PM

I certainly feel this way once in a while
I don't know why people say life is short,
It is the longest thing we will ever do.
Ponder on this. I really find your poetry to be a fav. of mine

Debo

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