Open Poetry #38 |
Reconsider Me |
Will Rhyme Member
since 2006-05-22
Posts 149 |
Walking past your house on springtime eve: nightsplashed sidewalks and dreamy streetlamps reconsider me. The wind: a silent fan from wall of dark, brushing face, backs of hands and craves to reconsider me. Now past your slumbering house: where you sleep with him, arm in arm, breathing into his face...HIS FACE! Ah, but your dreams reconsider me! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
welcome to Passions! I like this! I'll be looking for more of yorus |
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Will Rhyme Member
since 2006-05-22
Posts 149 |
Thanks. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Welcome this is intense. I like that. |
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Will Rhyme Member
since 2006-05-22
Posts 149 |
Thank You SEA |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I can just see him so intense...willing himself into her dreams!!! Nicely done. |
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Will Rhyme Member
since 2006-05-22
Posts 149 |
Thank you for the reply Paula. Will |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
Nicely penned Willy. Welcome to Pips. Cheers - Ed “True absurdism is not less but more real than reality” |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
I, too, will be looking for more from you. This if 'willful' and very poetic, beautifully descriptive in it's heartbreak! I love the metaphors of life in the night. Klassy |
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Will Rhyme Member
since 2006-05-22
Posts 149 |
Thank You! Will |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Smile One of my favorite all time tunes is titled the same, and you manage to maintain the plea without replicating lyric. Zevon Warren, and oh you've no idea how close this one is to my poor New Awlins heart-- "Reconsider Me" indeed. Welcome to Passions. Much enjoyed. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
welcome to the passion and we have all had hearts that do not heal |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
The wind: a silent fan from wall of dark, brushing face, backs of hands and craves to reconsider me. enjoyed your perspective... M |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A wonderful start, Will. Welcome to Passions! Please, check your email for a Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to Passions. Excellent entrance post. TD |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Welcome to Passions! Enjoyed the read - thanks. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! I so much enjoyed your entrance post. I am quickly become a big fan. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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Will Rhyme Member
since 2006-05-22
Posts 149 |
And, thanks again! |
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Debo Member
since 2006-04-18
Posts 321Texas U.S.A. |
I must comment on this one as well "Now past your slumbering house: where you sleep with him, arm in arm, breathing into his face...HIS FACE!" I liked the power at the end of this paragraph. Welcome to PIP... Debo |
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Will Rhyme Member
since 2006-05-22
Posts 149 |
Thank you Deb, Will |
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