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Open Poetry #38

Old Brooklyn

Frank W. Torres
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since 2006-06-10

Posts 133

0 posted 2006-06-12 09:34 PM

                    Old Brooklyn

    From his broken apartment window he curses the children playing in the street below.

    He has grown old in Brooklyn, flying pigions on the building rooftop across from the park.

    Standing there he thinks about snowmen dancing with dead cows in broken iceboxes, and then he laughs.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2006-06-12 09:48 PM

what a feeling this brings *sigh*

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2006-06-12 10:02 PM

"he thinks about snowmen dancing with dead cows in broken iceboxes"

Wonderful imagery shown here!
Thanks for the smile this thought brought.
Hugs~Nancy

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain ~

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28

Posts 2187
Oregon

3 posted 2006-06-13 01:56 AM

I've never been to Brooklyn but you really painted a picture for me. The neighborhood seems to have the same character as the old man.

Very colorful!

~ Klassy

Snowflake From Hell
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since 2003-07-10

Posts 777
My own little Icey Oblivion

4 posted 2006-06-14 03:16 PM

you definately get an image reading this

Hollow heroes seperate as they run...Shadows linger in your pain dead and done

Jess
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since 2006-06-06

Posts 243
Washington

5 posted 2006-06-14 03:20 PM

I agree. I can picture this perfectly in my head. And the fact that you were able to accomplish this in only three lines surprised me. So keep it up!

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