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Open Poetry #38

Our Worlds, Apart

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

0 posted 2006-06-08 08:25 PM

It Was Perfect
or So It Seemed
Our Friendship Strengthened
and Still Remained Weak
I Found Myself With You
Not Pretending To Be
I Was Real
Inside And Out
It Was Wonderful
and I Wanted More
But You Kept Pulling Away
I Had No Idea What Was In Store
You Kept Your Secret
and Held It Dear
Pushed Everything and Everyone Aside
Including Me
You Shut Me Out
But I Broke Through
I Wanted To Know Everything
I Wanted You
It Was Give and Take
You Gave Me Your Secret
and Took Yourself Away
Yet I'm Still Here
With Arms Wide Open
My Heart Bleeding
Our Worlds Apart
Doesn't Have To Be
I Still Care About You, Sweetie
Even If You Have HIV

I Thought of You Today,
And What We Could've Had
For A Brief Moment I Had You
And Still, I Somehow Knew
I'd Have To Let Go

Jess
Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 243
Washington

1 posted 2006-06-08 09:20 PM

"You Gave Me Your Secret and Took Yourself Away..." great line. And the ending was a surprise. I liked that your poem wasnt all sunshine and stars, but dealt with something real...
(although I AM sunshine and stars)

marcel
Senior Member

since 2003-03-02

Posts 660
az, usa

2 posted 2006-06-11 04:04 AM

so much emotion and subtle power in this piece. i loved it!

Frank W. Torres
Member

since 2006-06-10

Posts 133

3 posted 2006-06-11 01:28 PM

Well Written. Extream impact!

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