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Poetry is for Dreamers
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Poetry is for Dreamers |
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ballajosue Junior Member
since 2006-06-04
Posts 45Ca, Us |
Stop Dreaming There isn’t ever going to be World Peace Unless we all start Leaving. Democracy will live on. even if its wrong. So Stop Dreaming. Capitalism will never die, just because people lie, people fight, and people die. So Stop Dreaming. World Hunger will always exist, because if even one was to feed everyone on the list, by the time one would finish feeding the rest, the first you fed would be starving AGAIN. So Stop Dreaming. Words that rhyme on paper and expressed later arent going to make it any better so cry now or cry later all you can do is dream about it later. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
When young we are usually very idealistic, a good thing, trying to make the world a better place... As we age, we see that it takes much more work to make those changes and even if we are dreamers...some of those dreams do come truer for some. You must always dream and work towards those dreams despite the nightmares that hamper us. M |
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ballajosue Junior Member
since 2006-06-04
Posts 45Ca, Us |
yah.. "dont let you're dreams be dreams" |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
They say to me i am a dreamer of nightmares They say i am the darkness in the the light I say is it not better to dream without hope than not to dream at all. I went to the desert on a horse with no name, it felt good to get out of the rain. |
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kif kif Member
since 2006-06-01
Posts 439BCN |
Hello. I admire your 'Rah!', but your words are not enough. It's not enough to say 'Capitalism will never die/because people lie...' too abstract. This is a rant with little substance, because you've tried to write everything into this. If you want to show the vibe better, perhaps you should take one idea, like capitalism, or democracy, and find a metaphor for it-an alternate reality of it. BROTHER JOHN's written a great piece called "Soul Food" that I think you'd be inspired reading. That said, I do like the rhythm, it's tight and works well with the idea for the content. As a 1st draft, I'd say this is solid. After all, most songs are pretty abstract, but the rhythm adds to the atmosphere. Thanks for the read. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
ballajosue I hear your heart in this and I believe you. I agree with nakdthoughts. Keep dreaming. Keep working. http://spiritual-endeavors.org/peace/the-hund.htm Maybe you are the 100th Monkey. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I AM the dream, not I have a dream. ~enjoyed the write, and the thoughtful replies~ |
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ballajosue Junior Member
since 2006-06-04
Posts 45Ca, Us |
thanks alot guys for the help. kif, i do see your point, it is maybe a little too cliche', but it is a first draft and i look forward to using your advice when i do a re-write, thx alot once again guys. |
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Debo Member
since 2006-04-18
Posts 321Texas U.S.A. |
It may be a little to cliche But I liked it Debo |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
I remember a sketch on "Home Improvement" once where Tim asked Wilson if he was ever afraid. Wilson replied that yes, he was afraid...afraid that he lived as someone else's dream, that they would wake up and he would not exist any more. That has stayed me: It is the thought that counts. |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
As long as there is the thought of "error" There will arise the thought of a need for "correction". As long as there is the thought of a need for "correction"...The thought of "error" will continue. "I must help you or you will surely drown", said the monkey, as he placed the fish high into the tree. |
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