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Devious Intellectual Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 112 |
let me know if its good and lines you like..ill make a revision and make its all the same syllable count if its worth it..thanks Bridges As life moves and freezes we are constantly making decisions Most choices are made and no room is left for revisions In life we travel far and wide forever crossing bridges Overcoming obstacles as one climbs over difficult ridges Sometimes we cross and find a place full of comfort Other instances we quickly cross back leaving some~hurt Some mornings the gasoline odor is detected before realization Bridges become burned as if there never existed a foundation Life road's throws us twists, boulders, bridges, and hope It's a tug of war, without hope we'd let go of the rope Dreamers we are, our dreams lead us to lands distant far I'm just a wanderer, traveling, still wishing on that star |
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Kimberly ann Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 61 |
i liked all of it you made really good points in this!! good job |
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Ella Blue Junior Member
since 2006-05-26
Posts 47 |
"As life moves and freezes we are constantly making decisions"...moves and freezes...I like this, and we DO have to make decisions, just like breathing we have no choice,because if not they will make us. also, the idea that foundations built on sand rather then stone (or bridges)..are not of true hold-fast strength, like many of our decisions, relationships etc...I like  Keep on |
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Devious Intellectual Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 112 |
thanks...and the foundation comment def. a change that might make it better by refering to foundation built on sand....thank you all |
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