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Open Poetry #38

I want you ...

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2006-05-31 03:14 AM

I want you to see my sky
as clear as a lover’s eyes
bearing down, down, down,
to uplift this passion of mine
dead. dead, dead,
yet still so much alive.

And in this embrace of sky
at the peak of innate desire
your name again, again, again,
escapes like a vagabond sigh
from the constraints and restrictions
placed heavy upon a life.

Above, above, above the feel
of earth’s so subtle killing fields
sky and I with love in mind
act out the intent of a dream
forever, forever, forever,
inherently not as it seems.

I want you to see my sky,
my beautiful, beautiful, sky!

Helen / 31 May 2006

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2006-05-31 07:37 AM

amazing simply amazing...

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2006-05-31 10:15 AM

Well, I certainly can see your beautiful sky!!!

Sending you a hug-o-love,

Linda

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2006-05-31 05:16 PM

Helen

So far your sky from mine, but the feeling of it still lives within me and this amazing poem

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

4 posted 2006-05-31 06:28 PM

“I want you to see my sky

And in this embrace of sky

Above, above, above the feel

I want you to see my sky”

You have made music with this write.
Beautiful music with the first lines of each stanza.
Very nice!!

JL

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