Open Poetry #38 |
modality (for jo jo) |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Imagine this: a net with knots tied with some meticulous and then imagine it some more tied with craft and intricants until it were dimensional in thirds and fours-- abirthing fifth. Allow it to take a form and then you are - you're getting warm - to what it is and what it ain't and picture it as light and hey! then you see us modalite strings in tie of fiber opt and ultimate lite-brite... now-you-see-us now-you-don't the brown outs are the "us" that won't co-operate within the splay of connection gradiant and drowning in our yesterdays of every pain remembered as a point of reference and that-- is difficult today. "Be a beacon" fight the night I'll bet you never thought of light as a sword in battledark-- not an edge of cutting, but a flame to grant a bit of spark to the nets that keep us down like balloons in pen of cage bound to get away... they pray bobbing at the knit of this popping like a suicide bomber, one step closer this is not the blueprint nor the plan and I type much better than the ones who died ahead, before we started making knots. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You tied this one up just right... what a web. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
omg as always, you tie up truth so it won't get away |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
the brown outs are the "us" that won't co-operate within the splay of connection gradiant and drowning in our yesterdays of every pain remembered as a point of reference and that-- is difficult today. You've done it again my friend. Stopped me in my tracks this did. luv you, Chrislane Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
I just knew you'd blossom with great poetry based on your horrible experience. What beauty, I sincerely thank you for but wish you hadn't lived the basis that they spring from. Rae [This message has been edited by sandgrain (05-31-2006 11:09 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"I type much better than the ones who died ahead, before we started making knots." Nodding. Karen, can you hear me grinning way over here in Houston? Thank you my very dear britelite! you know......jojo |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Ser. your mind has a way of dousing us with a liberal dose of brilliance... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
"Be a beacon" fight the night I'll bet you never thought of light as a sword in battledark-- not an edge of cutting, but a flame to grant a bit of spark to the nets that keep us down like balloons in pen of cage bound to get away... your a marvelous poet...this was awesome...one of which I'm certain, the person whom you wrote this for will be overwhelmed... Hats off to ya Lady |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
::smiles:: Regardless of what is seen... I love what I see... In your ink blots. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
<3 Loved it. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This reminds me of watching a spider one time try to re-build her web. I waited as long as I could to see how she made out, but had to return the next day. I returned to find her having used part of the old one to build a new one. Sometimes things simply just change to stay the same don't they? An intricate write Mz. S. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Here I am again, inadequate to tell you how this hit me, but it does! A lot said here! You brilliantly express what I may have thought, but unable to word. Guess my voice is tied up in nots. Glad yours isn't! miscellanea |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
This deserves another round on the front page...as does all your writing.. love ya lady. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I am always taken aback by your work serenity... and just a little envious. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Serenity, Your poems are always so worth the read--and the re-read your poetry sometimes requires of me. You see beneath the surface, beneath the darkness, and you cut it like a curtain with your sword of radiance. You have amazing ability to see beyond your eyes, to find the points of reference that sparkle in the dark until the dots connect in some apprehension of purpose and design--nets and knots, epiphany. ~ Klassy |
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Will Rhyme Member
since 2006-05-22
Posts 149 |
"magine this: a net with knots" Hey, I don't have to "MAGINE" it. Been there. far as I got in your poem. almost choked my throat air off...it did! scared me away. Will never go there again: Will |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I know what y'mean, Will. I was scarred for life by "The Itsy Bitsy Spider" One can never be too careful. But anyhow, I did want to come back to thank everyone else who managed to brave the terrifying depths of my subconsicous, and managed to overcome their trembling long enough to type a polite and cordial reply. So thanks everybody. And Will, I do understand. Just when I think it is safe, somethng always seems to leap out of the darkness to bite me too. I exit, thoroughly disgusted... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
http://www.dailyom.com/articles/2006/3696.html |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
OM...... |
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