Open Poetry #38 |
At 7 |
Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Plain No makeup Grief upon her lips She pushes the shopping cart Alone With a single loaf of bread She feeds herself Every night At 7 |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
sad snapshot some don't even feed at any hour |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Yes that is true. Thanks again for reading. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Impressive Page. You have said so much in so few words. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thanks you Lady Kate. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Excellent and very sad. - Owl |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
Spare Rib under her arm Spare Rib under her chin escaping she finds herself and the future is another world Yes I do relate to this Dave |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thanks... |
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Liz Sinclair Member
since 2006-05-06
Posts 93Atlantis |
There is something special about this piece. It could be anyone of us and all of us. I like that you didn't embellish and make it wordy. The simple design gives it power...Nice job. Take care, Liz...Carpe Diem
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Going through the motions disconnectedly -- I see this vividly, and think of the poverty grief bestows. ~ K |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you Liz and Classy.. your comments move me. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Reminds me of the inner grief that many experience...they couldn't find there way out...and many fall by the wayside as a result...James |
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Ella Blue Junior Member
since 2006-05-26
Posts 47 |
Few words, vivid picture, and we've all seen her, haven't we?:0) Well done~ |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you James and Ella... I Appreciate you words |
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