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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Lethargic, she lies in the creaking swing That hugs what shade the yard offers, Breeze blowing over hot skin only When one foot makes the effort to push. Blouse soaked from morning chores She draws full skirt high between damp thighs Wishing her Pa would let her wear pants – She works hard as any man. Underneath the porch, mama-dog drops With relief moans into the cooler earth Settling to soothe her swollen belly That churns with pup heads eager for birth Timmy’s down at the swimming hole Uncaring that not much is left but mud Reeking with the stench of fish dying In a stream that’s drying just like the hay She’ll have to move in just a moment – Start supper simmering as she feeds the pigs, So she fans her face as she straightens her clothes And slides in pool of sweat towards September |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ruth, that was just an incredible movie I just watched, I loved it! Like you - I am up here "waiting for rain" to cool me down for the first time in years. Happy Fall to you all. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Beautiful! We are awaiting autumn and you are coming into summer... Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth That swing, the full skirt and sweat of a woman's labor...so well described. I loved the photo with feeling you took!!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern I loved the photo too, well done. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Ruth, this was an awesome painting you've colored Loved the visuals... hugs to ya and thank you for sharing. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthernCharmer~ I'm rooting for 'Pa' to let her wear pants too ! This is so rich in imagery ... moving word-photos~ I've got a little Florida (Ernesto style) rain I can send her way~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh, I like this one. The scene is sharp and strong, and the use of the skirt and the pregnant dog is subtle but to the point. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
oh! this is hard hitting and beautifully done I'm there |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What a beautifully vivid write! |
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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
summer goes so quickly but its memory lingers |
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Neotec Member
since 2006-08-22
Posts 112 |
nice summer thought and i like the Light of the words |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Suthern gal, you are one heck of a writer. I could visual this scene so easily....great job and much enjoyed. *hugs*....jo (PS....cool weather's comin!) |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Suthern, Enjoyed. Put me in mind of another scene of farm life. Cousin Wes, who loved the farm working hard getting in the hay. Brother Joe who hated farm work lying under a tree. Here comes Pa to check on the boys. Quick thinking Joe pours water over his head. Wes still working hard. Pa sees Joe under the tree all wet and says. "Boy,You sure have been working hard today. Sit there and rest, Wes can finish up". True story. LOL martyjo |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
So graphic, this poem! A different physical sensation in reading each line, and every one feels like I'm right there inside your skin. I've been missing you, Laura....ol' Ed would like to see poem after poem from you. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A lazy, hazy, daze... Your vividly descriptive writing has even got me perpiring in my very cool, air-conditioned home office!  Ye gads, girl! Ya shore knows howta write!!! I think I'll go take a nap. I'm suddenly feeling very hot and listless. Loveya! Linda |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
My sincere thanks to each of you... I wasn't sure this would work, but it wouldn't leave me alone. *S* Thank you for receiving it so kindly! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A most wonderful piece full of vivid imagery! Well done. Hugs~Nancy Now - while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
suthern, A portrait you have painted here with perfect brushing! It is so easy to visual the atmosphere, mood, even the old mama dog waiting to drop those pups! This is an amazing piece of art! Definitely will add this to your others on my library shelf! Take care, suthern gal. misc |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
oh wow, do you write this style well...i feel sun soaked and tired right along with the words as they drip down the page |
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