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ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

0 posted 2006-08-29 04:16 PM

upon first rays
missing you
echoed cries
of mourning doves
that could not stay

too much to hold,
you recede
endless daylight
revealing time gone
cold

and as you near
feelings rest,
impressions
in arms that mold
without fear

the long in a day

In rhythms to a rise the days shall follow ... each Yesterday, each Tomorrow. - Ct/05

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

1 posted 2006-08-29 04:19 PM

ct,
===============
upon first rays
missing you
echoed cries
of mourning doves
that could not stay
===============

Nicely written. I read this several times and find it very well done. Being around the mourning doves and Arizona sunsets I see the perfect parallels you have penned.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2006-08-29 04:30 PM

Bravo!
Well done!
Long time no see, my friend

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

3 posted 2006-08-29 05:44 PM

Thank you both ...
I actually wrote a full version and then
through a friends eyes wrote this ....

... I could hear her echoing each word

she is the other part of me

Thanks again for the read!

Ct

FNG
Member

since 2006-02-07

Posts 477

4 posted 2006-08-30 08:11 AM

passionate and romantic

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

5 posted 2006-08-30 08:31 AM

Craig, first its good to see your words againk and second, this is by far, my favorite of yours. absolutely beautiful write!!

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

6 posted 2006-08-31 08:57 AM

there is a peace within this....words dont often fail me....hugssss you

And so it those we live with
and should know who elude us
But we can still love them
we can love completely
without complete understanding

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

7 posted 2006-08-31 07:53 PM

Nice work, Craig. Sounds like something good is in your heart right now.
Sandra

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

8 posted 2006-09-01 12:59 PM

nicely written...

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