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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2006-05-27 01:19 PM

Searching for Oz  Series

~~
Justin,

~~

This,

this memory
that dwells between the first
and last drop of each rain

                      empty in its own darkness

I use to dream to see myself
for every quiet moment
for every moment of peace

now:
                      for every moment we pretend to be

so a breeze can have ribbons
we cover truth
we hide fear
but we remain; we are

tears of sadness shattering           the window/s
broken glass from a distance
as blue explodes

you watch me;  you press your palms for understanding

I am alone
thespeckled glass

                       bare

yet; still
a rainbow inside
a crimson star
the wait of discover

emerald/s leave/s the night silent
                       day/s unaware

                       wondering why so many hunger

and you? you come in the name of peace
and laugh with your hidden smile

I strive to overcome you
but I am weak

if you could understand,  and leave my mind
the uncounted structure of my wish
will hide between our memories
and night will divide
my soul
an angel lost
till I part from me
and visit each star

you placed within my reach

because somewhere deeper
then we know
we love
we are
we remain

this memory

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2006-05-27 01:27 PM

Greeneyes
You spent some time on this one. Excellent

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2006-05-27 01:40 PM

Well done...and those are the most beautiful
green eyes....no wonder, huh?

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

3 posted 2006-05-27 01:56 PM

such rainbows and thoughts shine true ....

nice to read you today!

cT

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2006-05-27 02:22 PM

Lauren...You are so in tune with feeling that you make them into colors...beautiful!

Ella Blue
Junior Member

since 2006-05-26

Posts 47

5 posted 2006-05-27 02:56 PM

...painful, but lovely

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2006-05-27 03:23 PM

yet; still
a rainbow inside
a crimson star
the wait of discover

emerald/s leave/s the night silent
day/s unaware

wondering why so many hunger

Awesome poetry, dear Lauren.

Love,
Margherita

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

7 posted 2006-05-27 04:31 PM

beautiful my

sis.
so good to see your words again.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

8 posted 2006-05-27 04:36 PM

"because somewhere deeper
then we know
we love
we are
we remain

this memory"

this made my eyes sting

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

9 posted 2006-05-27 06:19 PM

This brought a tear to my eye - so sorrowful and yet so beautiful to read.....Your imagery, tone, expression and presentation are as always beyond compare....I've been reading your poetry for years now, and I truly wish that I can better myself as a poet and write with the depth that you possess

I'm saving this~

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

lost4dm
New Member

since 2006-05-28

Posts 6
Louisiana, USA

10 posted 2006-05-28 10:03 AM

Touched the deepest heart of me...Haunting.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

11 posted 2006-06-21 01:31 AM

this memory
that dwells between the first
and last drop of each rain

                      empty in its own darkness

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
                      for every moment we pretend to be

so a breeze can have ribbons
we cover truth
we hide fear
but we remain; we are

tears of sadness shattering           the window/s
broken glass from a distance
as blue explodes

you watch me;  you press your palms for understanding

I am alone
thespeckled glass

                       bare

yet; still
a rainbow inside
a crimson star
the wait of discover

emerald/s leave/s the night silent
                       day/s unaware
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I had to come find one of yours...
the imagery in this defines ethereal beauty.

and this line...

so a breeze can have ribbons

thats groovier than I have words for.

Hey pretty lady...hope life is treating you kind...so lovely to read you.

"Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take ...
but by the moments that take our breath away.”

G.Carlin

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

12 posted 2006-06-21 10:52 AM

Words escape me...

Patricia

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

13 posted 2006-06-22 01:19 PM

The bad news is you make us wait so long for the next posting. The good news is that it is always oh so worth the wait when it arrives! Your whispering shouts rainbows and aches oceans.

- Owl

Kristabell
Senior Member

since 2003-11-29

Posts 678
Portland, OR

14 posted 2006-06-22 03:29 PM

Nicely expressed. So sad.

Kristabell

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

15 posted 2006-06-22 04:49 PM

"and night will divide
my soul
an angel lost
till I part from me
and visit each star

you placed within my reach

because somewhere deeper
then we know
we love
we are
we remain

this memory"

Simply amazing sweet Lauren.
You just keep on getting better.
Love ya lady~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain ~

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