Open Poetry #38 |
Dune |
Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Dune One night I saw while strolling sand the solemn figure of a man against a stage of chalk white dune, the shoreline bathed in pearly moon As I came close I heard him there breathe in a breath of tear soaked air. And so I paused a moment’s length to gain a moment’s weight of strength. Dark waters came in rising waves like flapping bats from sultry caves that rose and spread their daunting cloaks more ominous than canvas strokes It was as though a blackened sea had targeted his entity, consuming footholds as it went, eroding hollows with intent He looked at me as though to plea a moment‘s length of sanity I saw in him more dire a gloom than where I stood beside my dune Above the cold and salty deep, the dawn washed up from painful sleep and bathed us both in purple veils like mystic mist of spouting whales Contentment seemed a valid goal within the reaches of my soul. Upon his arm I pressed my hand like footprints laid in tide washed sand And as I turned from his domain I felt him breathe a breath of pain And knew my own held much less gloom than other souls by other dunes A gasping breath of salty air, enough to free my own despair, with scent of rose clutched in his hand that night as I was strolling sand. Elizabeth Santos |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Excellent. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
What a way to start my morning... Knowing you've been up before me... writing this gem.. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Geeze Liz, you amaze me, every next poem of yours is better then the last...this was no exception, and rather, all the more... amazing write...loved this and you... thank you for sharing. |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
this is a wonderful piece I'm becoming a huge fan of your work ~*Sheli*~ By words the mind is winged |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
GR8 piece! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Elizabeth, this is so beautiful. I have always enjoyed your poems. |
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