Open Poetry #38 |
What do Daisies Know of Hell? |
the quell Member
since 2006-07-19
Posts 144Liverpool, UK |
What do Daisies know of Hell? I’ll always be the skeleton in your closet The Minotaur, roaming the fevered labyrinth Of your psyche I’ll haunt the fleecy, foam-embellished shore Of your solemn, sunken isle – a weeping diamond in the feral dawn Bejewelled. Intangible as the delicate magic that shimmers and breathes Behind my television screen. Through an ice-edged lens, we exchange… A single glance You keenly exhibit the frozen smile Of a man who has forgotten how to cry Anything, to paint a new history Anything to forget. I’ll cram our dirty memories into a red velvet clutch-bag And stride indifferently from your side (Although I seem to have misplaced My legs…and… My soul.) Knocking aside the cobwebs, and the dust-riddled past I ignore the tangled shoals of stars, glistening behind your eyes Tears, faded as the newly risen dead You always were like television, to me Casting the world into sharp, sharp focus. Bringing life closer to my eyes – dragging it further from my soul “Oh, you occupied my time…” You live for dreams, and so you live not at all. Constructing shrines to the deity of soap opera My face, lost In the shadows of time Begone, my dear. Paradise beckons Heaven is no more than a trendy Parisian café (I’d never fit in…) And God – God is a pavement artist A long-haired student with nothing better to do. Plucking dreams from the air, drunk on the pungent wine of righteousness (We built ourselves a tyrant, and a shattered morgue to house the living) The perils of the future can so easily be ignored But there is no escape When the phantoms lie within. Your embrace is a taut gallows loop (Though it speaks of other things: Of magic-carpet clouds, tormenting a silver savannah sky, Swallow-tailed standards, wrinkling in the cool alabaster dizziness Of innocence.) And now, one last daisy blooms Twining itself (serpentine) about the frigid machine’s heart Inside my television Unfurling sweet and slow as syrup – a comb-fringed head rearing Colder than Empyrean Brighter than a sea of vacant celebrity smiles I’m lost, tangled, disparate… Shackled to your dreams And I can’t change The channel. Where black, bleeding roses await the Thirteen, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome Rachel to Passions! Outstanding write! TD |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Exquisite lines here, Rachel. "And God – God is a pavement artist A long-haired student with nothing better to do." |
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deasomnians Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 87California |
Obviously very well thought out, and it works. Excellent job! "Nature has implanted in our minds an insatiable longing to seek the truth" - CJCL Convention Theme 2005 |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
This is wonderful. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
loved the ending |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Wow! Welcome to PIP! Outstanding write here, superb! *applauding* |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
This poem captivated me. Great writing. Thank you. aziza |
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Wilga Junior Member
since 2006-07-25
Posts 22 |
this is really great. I so identified with this one. Great expressions and depth Beautiful |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Can't even pull the plug on this one... to get rid of the visuals you've displayed so very well. Excellent work... Keep it up! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
wow~ this one tunnels deep~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
there were just to to many dynamic symbols here specifically created from the distance, that communicated visual elements where darkness melds with the light, great necessity, great power reflecting this... Through an ice-edged lens, we exchange… A single glance You keenly exhibit the frozen smile Of a man who has forgotten how to cry Anything, to paint a new history Anything to forget. I’ll cram our dirty memories into a red velvet clutch-bag And stride indifferently from your side (Although I seem to have misplaced My legs…and… My soul.) whew, loved this...and the intensity, the focus!!!!!! excellent! |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Wow! Such imagery and a fantastic ending. Loved the write...and I'm looking for more of it. Shenachie |
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the quell Member
since 2006-07-19
Posts 144Liverpool, UK |
Thank you all SO much for your kind comments, and your words of welcome! *hugs all round* Where black, bleeding roses await the Thirteen, |
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