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XOx Uriah xOX
Senior Member

since 2006-02-11

Posts 1403
Virginia

0 posted 2006-07-24 02:11 AM

                     POOF !
(  When an Old Roadrunner Becomes Wile E. Coyote )
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Dionysus
whispered in my ear

"Go Orpheus"

and I obeyed.

Last night,
my music charmed
the underworld.

This morning,
I laid in the dark

beneath the wagon

and shielded my eyes
from the sharp, piercing
daggers of the sun.

I was not thrown
from Mount Olympus.

I fell just short of Hades.

It was only a plunge

from the height
of twelve steps

nevertheless,
the impact was
great and painful.

Now,
I wait...

for the dust
to settle...

When I can witness

or receive reports
of the damages.

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

1 posted 2006-07-24 02:17 AM

I like this cause I like it. And that is all I am gonna say about that (okay, I stole that line from Forrest Gump!)

Billy_tha_Kidd
Junior Member

since 2006-07-17

Posts 27
Indiana USA

2 posted 2006-07-24 02:58 AM

kinda weird....have some flowers!

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

3 posted 2006-07-24 10:16 PM

I like it 'cause I like it too Uriah... or is it Wile E Coyote today?

"When I can witness

or receive reports
of the damages."

the quell
Member

since 2006-07-19

Posts 144
Liverpool, UK

4 posted 2006-07-24 10:20 PM

I loved this piece!!!!! It was so oddly written and constructed, but the language was stark and powerful, and quite humourous at the same time. It had a stream-of-consciousness feel to it that I loved, AND references to Greek myth! Perfect!

Where black, bleeding roses await the Thirteen,
I see not the stars, but the darkness between

XOx Uriah xOX
Senior Member

since 2006-02-11

Posts 1403
Virginia

5 posted 2006-07-25 01:20 AM

Thank you all for taking time to read and comment.

Yes Lady... I was Wile E. Coyote most of the day. I finally located the straps of my Acme rough-outs and pulled myself back up. ::smiles::

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

6 posted 2006-07-25 08:00 AM

beep-beep.....

Wilga
Junior Member

since 2006-07-25

Posts 22

7 posted 2006-07-25 08:08 AM

Great poem, off beat. Love it

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

8 posted 2006-07-25 08:57 AM

loved the entire poem, however, this reigns first and foremost

"It was only a plunge

from the height
of twelve steps"

and yes, dialogue is simply one component of the narrative

hugs

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