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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
You don't know what you did to me All those words you said to me Were they just lines Were they just lies You don't know what you put me through Now I just write and shedding tears over you I just seem to cry When I come to see if you are here. All the emptiness spills over me I don't know what to think or see I am blind by the love that we share. You better not have walked away from me That is a part of you that I just can not see You promised me. You promised me! And here I am still believing in you. Missing you. In pain over you. Please, don't go. aziza ------ PS - He did not go. |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA |
Love is such a touchy thing sometime, often misguided, often mispercieved, and the entreaties of love so earnest because the personal stakes seem so high. You have captured well the anguish,the ambivalence, the urgency of need and want. I am happy as you indicate by your post script, that such grear emotions and appeals don't always fall on deaf and insensitive ears! Good Write! David Every Day's a Blessing And Gift-Wrapped from Above, Share it with another And Spread the Father's Love!!! May You come to Know His Best Blessing |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Our hearts and souls are just looking for an outlet my friend, thank God we have found one here. Glad he did not go, but also hope that you are happy. Take care my friend and be well. Sincerely Rick |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Love the poem but that PS is the best line of all!  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Often, the greater the hardship, the greater the reward. This struck me as a 10 on the Rickter. Be well. TD |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
heartfelt...my ex promised me so much yet he couldn't keep his promises of not hurting me...I've spent many nights searching for comfort... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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elisalie16 Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 118new jersey |
this poem has a song-y ring to it, and i like it very much. you did an excellent job of describing emotions, and i enjoyed it very much |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you for the wonderful comments. It does kind of read like a song. aziza |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Love is holding on and love is letting go...it caring and sharing and giving and forgiving...James |
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