Open Poetry #38 |
Sand |
suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
On gift of wind I could sometimes rise But gravity always Conquered dreams I envied clay Its power to stand In cube of brick In potter’s hand Then you offered Lift, life And love enabled Form More than mere castle By the sea With your touch I became me Did you hear my song As at last I soared? I had no mouth But oh, I sang Until again alone I shattered, Scattered grains On each breath of breeze Worth of me Just memory |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern A sad but wonderful read. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthernLady~ Oh, but what a beautiful memory your footprints would make in someone's sand~ 'More than mere castle By the sea With your touch I became me' *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
you slipped through my hand sand |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
More than mere castle By the sea With your touch I became me Did you hear my song As at last I soared? I had no mouth But oh, I sang Until again alone I shattered, Scattered grains On each breath of breeze Worth of me Just memory amazing, this needs to go back to the top for everyone to enjoy... lovely, delightful...and so good to see you again, missed you |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"More than mere castle By the sea With your touch I became me" Oh my...how beautiful!! Hugs~Nancy For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
oh my the images you use....the sand slipping away......how powerful...incredible write lady.....sad...but incredibly done |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
darn it you got me deep |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I envied clay Its power to stand In cube of brick In potter’s hand ~*~ If I didn't know clay before, I know it now. Malleable... Well done, Ruth. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Oh, suthern. This is worthy and beautiful, just like you! I know sometimes I have been picked up by the wind to feel free and confident, later to be placed on too familiar ground where I... We just have to stand and know that we are as valued as theflowers and rain. You are certainly one of my favorite poets and people. Take care. hugs, misce |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Raw and so sad suthern... "Did you hear my song As at last I soared? I had no mouth But oh, I sang" |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ah, Laura...I've had this exact feeling...but couldn't find a way to say it with the kind of poise and beauty that you do. This is simply excellent. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
This is heart-rending but beautiful, dear southern lady! Just reading it makes mine ache right along with yours. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Interesting and sad write.....but, an image in every verse.. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh, surthern, you never disappoint me.....this is remarkable! *hugs*....jo |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you, my friends, for your wonderful responses... they are greatly appreciated! *S* |
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