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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon 
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I walk in silence Seeking after Something that I need to find Not knowing, As I stumble faster Down the path To sure disaster, What it is. I'm searching blind. Chasing faded dreams Through darkened woods Hoping for the faintest glimmer Looking for the slightest shimmer Of a promise to be delivered As hope is growing ever dimmer Of the madness ever ending Am I breaking While I'm bending To another's will? Its neverending! And all the while I should be tending To my own most inner needs Do I fight Or will I falter? Do I stand firm Or should I barter For my life Such as it is My steps are quickly Growing slower Through this dense wood My fear creates I try to find The source of sobbing Screams that echo Off the mountains Hopeless whimpers Of frustration I search for answers To hidden questions As the cries crescendo thundering, pounding Screaming in my brain Just as I'm sure There is no ending To this hell My mind's creating A heart wrenching shriek Rips from my throat Jolting me awake And as I sit Confused and lonely The dream fades quickly As it came Soft sobs still echo All around me I understand from where they came and raise my hands to dampened cheeks To catch the tears That stream my face Sheli 2001 [This message has been edited by divine chaos (07-17-2006 10:39 AM).] |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Wow....very articulate. If only I could speak so clearly of the inner workings of me. Nice to read you. I'm hanging out in the gentleness of the blue this peaceful evening. Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
Wow is right...very nice read Sheli. I love it.  |
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themute Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 469Maryland |
Am I'm breaking While I'm bending is the am intended? i suggest i am, doesnt go with the pattern but it sounds a little rhythmic, or you could just say i'm breaking, whatever... conjurs memories of my own crying dreams, god i miss them. thank you I am the two-toed wanderer |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
thankies for the kind comments themute, actually that "Am I'm" was a typo lol, thanks for catching it! I changed it  |
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deasomnians Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 87California |
Am I breaking While I'm bending To another's will? Glad you changed it, because otherwise it wouldn't have reminded me of the question I ask myself all the time. Excellent write. "Wow" was my first reaction, too. "Nature has implanted in our minds an insatiable longing to seek the truth" - CJCL Convention Theme 2005 |
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