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aziza
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

0 posted 2006-07-13 12:34 PM


Write me a poem he said
so I hold out a handful of words
tossing them into the air
face lifted as they rain
broken syllables and sobs
around me
and form dangling participles
of precipitation blending with my tears
mending the cracks of my broken heart
and the poem is really one long sentence
that honestly says absolutely nothing.

I know it is not a keeper
it's a maudlin attempt to express feelings
that I am unsure of
building walls for me to hide behind
making a sanctuary of loneliness.

Write me a poem he said
and I thought of words of love
yet, I feel only words that barb me
cutting until I bleed
helping me feel as I try so hard not to.

He said to write Him a poem
I'll try again tomorrow.

aziza

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1 posted 2006-07-13 08:17 AM


Aziza~

'I hold out a handful of words
tossing them into the air'


I like that little thought~

I do that sometimes ... hoping they land in my ink with a huge splash~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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dancing 'neath the moon
2 posted 2006-07-13 08:39 AM


so I hold out a handful of words
tossing them into the air
face lifted as they rain
broken syllables and sobs
around me
and form dangling participles
of precipitation blending with my tears
**********************************

these lines jump out at me every time I read this .. i love them

~*Sheli*~

By words the mind is winged
~Aristophanes~

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displaced
3 posted 2006-07-13 09:29 AM


wow! I love this!
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Listening to every heart
4 posted 2006-07-13 09:18 PM



Smiling at this...
I could have written it...
in some ways, I have...

those who don't [write]
will never understand
the urgency of breath




aziza
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
5 posted 2006-07-13 11:07 PM


Thank you all.  Your words mean a great deal to me.

aziza

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