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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2006-07-10 09:47 AM



those feelings
of eyes drawn to me
weren't there that night
time taking the toll
on faces, emptying out

so few spoken words
leaving doubt on the rise
lips barely touching lips
of emotions in want
almost a brush-off

holding back
becoming routine
as dreams lose their place
and the heart slows its beat
...tomorrow is beginning
to look like another
yesterday~~

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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jody5
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since 2005-12-21
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1 posted 2006-07-10 09:57 AM


Tomarrow is beginning to look like another yesterday.  I loved that line.  Good Poem.

Hugs Kimberly


divine chaos
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since 2006-07-09
Posts 617
dancing 'neath the moon
2 posted 2006-07-10 10:03 AM


there's such a wandering lostness about this piece, it brings a sigh ... well penned, I enjoyed the read

~*Sheli*~

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2006-07-10 10:06 AM


holding back
becoming routine
as dreams lose their place
and the heart slows its beat
...tomorrow is beginning
to look like another
yesterday~~

when love becomes bittersweet politics...

engrossing write

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
4 posted 2006-07-10 04:50 PM


jody5, thanks for reading  
  
divine chaos, "a wandering lostness" that's about it  

LeeJ, you always have such wonderful insight into a writer's words

when love becomes bittersweet politics... so true~~

hugs
M


  



[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (07-11-2006 11:07 AM).]

Serena
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since 2006-06-25
Posts 47

5 posted 2006-07-10 07:19 PM


ah that never ending loop of the continuous sadness of the past. At some point I think we all find ourselves stuck in this inevitable routine... but that doesn't mean we can't learn even when things just seem to repeat on a steady stoic base.. and eventually we always find out way out.
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
6 posted 2006-07-10 07:23 PM


*understanding*
Snowflake From Hell
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since 2003-07-10
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My own little Icey Oblivion
7 posted 2006-07-10 09:18 PM


ah the familiar feeling of "lost" i hate that feeling :| very good write however

Hollow heroes seperate as they run...Shadows linger in your pain dead and done

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