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fear stepped into the room
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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fear stepped into the room Probing deep into the soul dangers protrude obsessive like a precision maneuver dark & wickedly eager to penetrate what time had blacked out squirming maggots indulging on the most ancient of tongues... snapping slit seconds like the far side of bone from the eternal place of ghost ships with drive by shootings of malignant flesh tearing down invisible boundaries they were not allowed to cross drawing irresistible impulses painted on mind chatter black tides of some foreboding connection to interlocking mysteries an ocean with manicured nails monsters of children seeping into that scratching feeling of demise sytax of a sing-song kind of desert heat burning any assurance of tomorrows dripping down my face with the g-force of carnage black evil liquid seeping into my veins trying to make sense of a world gone mad evoking forensic imperfections making pacts with Satan foreshadowed in a meaty elixir of death by the inheritance of lethal intent how old is old, hummed the floodlight of soul where white flashes of food stores draw empty blanks within the dream rooms of sanity pinning me to one outside chance dangling by a thread gripping with strong hand like mists seemingly unreachable babbling like some hopeless unappreciated love in this place of darkness where thickening air delivers a cold ambience the shrill screams of black crow’s with naked tattoos circling around me coming in for the kill stalking seeking custody of my floating silliness long black fingers of drowning sorrows where moonlight fears vanish I search the black doorway of space like a blind man fingering words from the disembodied voice of the invisible standing right there in front of whatever it was I consumed as life sucking imagination from the chaos my after life frowns impatiently the insensitivity of me hangs onto the cool clean waters of life & the incoherent rings of mortal instinct being torn from me the bony hand of assault staring with a hollow black eye void of any gestures of compassion time well spent at the bottom of the ocean I am not cursed for the bitter setback of painful memories I am the predecessor of broken windows they bring with them, some earnings of light glinting a half open gate crumbling plaster walls the chocking stench of broken mountains soon.... lavender will be everywhere stronger and ultimately irresistable trying dark poetry...  |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
ok LeeJ, ya made me gag on my bagel with the squirming maggots .. but as I read further, I forgot all about breakfast. This piece, just .. wow. Very well penned, the imagery is wonderful! ~*sheli*~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh my! What did you eat before going to bed?!? lol I trust this is just a horrific nightmare ~ if not, remember that this too shall pass!  I never know where your pen will take us ~ but it is always one helluvva ride!  Linda |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lee~ The visual of the maggots got to me ... I'll come back and try it again after I've settled my tum-tum~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
so sorry to make you gals queezy, guess I had Pirates of the Caribbean overload tucked in the back lots of my conscienceness....maybe I should have posted this under dark poetry?  thanks so much for stopping by though... Have a great day |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
lol I don't think you needed to post it anywhere else, I know better than to read while I'm eating .. I really enjoyed it  ~*Sheli*~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lee~ Came back ... tried again ... decided to skip to the replies ... OH NO !! ... we're going to see 'Pirates of the Caribbean' in about an hour ... tell me when to close my eyes !!!!!  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
quote: Perhaps, therein lies the real danger, Lee. I've come to the conclusion lately that all my attempts to figure out the mindset of humanity as a whole is nearly pointless. so I seek the heart of individuals.... in doing so, I've come across some amazing hearts and minds, yours being one of them. NAMASTE, dear friend. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I think dark looks good on ya |
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deasomnians Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 87California |
"trying to make sense of a world gone mad evoking forensic imperfections making pacts with Satan foreshadowed in a meaty elixir of death by the inheritance of lethal intent" Love it, love it, love it. Great job. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
My God! "the bony hand of assault staring with a hollow black eye void of any gestures of compassion" That got to me more than the maggots. What an incredible poem! aziza |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
What a finale! Bring on the lavender, please! ....jo |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
you guys are to kind...and you warm my heart to boot...thanks to all of you for stopping by...and Margie...the movie was great...Davy Jones and his crew were fantastic, a hoot! Don't close your eyes, look for the details, pretty amazing costumes and special effects, Oh Gwad, I love that man in his Pirate get up!!!...it was a fun movie, enjoy, take a friend, pack a lunch, a bottle of wine...  Hey, wouldn't that be a great idea for a movie theater, you could pac a picnic basket? Course, that would kinda ruin their gain of 10.00 per person for popcorn and a soda...sheesh, what could I have been thinking?  Thanks again folks |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, this one certainly went to some "depth" of imagination... You sure you didn't have a hand in writing Pirates? Well done, LeeJ...especially when you can get readers' true reactions... but in the future, you may want to denote {not for breakfast reading)...  |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
lol Sunshine .. no kidding, my bagel went straight into the trash :p it was well worth the loss though |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
ok, no more wiggly worms, I promise to sustain...I promise to really try hard  guess that means I can't sing the worm song, right?  thanks so very much to all of you you guys are a hoot... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
That's funny, the maggots didn't bother me at all. I guess I saw enough of 'em last year to become inured. Your writing is always a trip into the subconscious, and what a trip it is! Your visuals are always intriguing, and I confess sometimes I don't "get them" with the whole of the poem, but then when I take the time to consider them alone, then I find a link to a them. and this: "black evil liquid seeping into my veins" reminded me of a favorite Grand Funk Railroad song--inside out looking out-- "Ice cold water runnin' through my veins" nod fear it does that, doesn't it? Love ya lady! enjoyed, and yep, even the maggots! (They are used medicinally again now, did you know that?) And I happen to know a guy who could use some maggot medicine on HIS tongue, for all the words he speaks are like dead, rotting meat. (see how I personalize the connections? ) and now I'll re-read Kacy's wise reply and try to apply it.  |
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