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Poetic Concept
Member

since 2006-06-25

Posts 66
God's Fingerprint

0 posted 2006-07-01 06:10 PM

A Poet...A Pen

Two-dimensional plane,
Pain contoured, though outlined shame
Divulged emotional stains,
Fallow-beaconed hate
On shallow lines,
Outline dies with chemical dyes,
Inscribing my life
Defining my demented side
Reviving cemented strife,
Abiding time-crying rife words
Adjectives, nouns, and verbs,
Words to express, my life, my dreams, my death
Sliced dreams, the scythe my pen
Ascending greed, condensing my infinite end
Descending hates within,
Emotional martyr suspended amid…
My soul…exposed with ink
Bleak existence begins,
External end extends…
Bending mirages of light…
Wrenched plight of life
Devoured with reckless strikes
and strokes…of pen

"How vain it is to sit down and write when u have not stood up to live"
Anonymous (Unknown)

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2006-07-01 07:52 PM

quote:
Bending mirages of light…
Wrenched plight of life
Devoured with reckless strikes
and strokes…of pen

It's a gift to be able to express in words, what our heart, mind and soul experience. And you have described our devouring passion well.

Love,
Margherita

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

2 posted 2006-07-01 09:03 PM

Much strife penned.
but by your hand,
a stroke of genius.

Brilliant write in what seems deep meditation.

JL

Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

The Shadow in Blue
Member

since 2006-05-18

Posts 493
EL, Michigan

3 posted 2006-07-01 10:20 PM

I liked how you summed up the emotion of why/how people write poetry. Good Job. I don't know, but maybe it could have been broken up into stanzas, but anyways it was still enjoyable.

Poetic Concept
Member

since 2006-06-25

Posts 66
God's Fingerprint

4 posted 2006-07-02 12:18 PM

thx you all for the feed

"How vain it is to sit down and write when u have not stood up to live"
Anonymous (Unknown)

jody5
Senior Member

since 2005-12-21

Posts 876
California, U.S.A.

5 posted 2006-07-02 01:15 AM

It hit me as sad.

Zara14
Junior Member

since 2006-06-27

Posts 11
Northen Ireland

6 posted 2006-07-04 07:05 AM

that poem is sad yet wonderfull

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

7 posted 2006-07-05 01:21 PM

this was intense, finding myself circling the drain, caught in a downward spiral of failure....

this was depth, heartbreak, brutal honesty...well done!!!!!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2006-07-05 01:47 PM

Stark, honest and intense!
Well done indeed.
Hugs~Nancy

Don't bring me down now,
let me stay here for awhile
You know life's too short,
let me bathe here in your smile.

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