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Open Poetry #38

At First Rain

soul drifter
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since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

0 posted 2006-06-25 05:07 PM

At First Rain

At first rain,
I huddle against you for warmth
Axl Rose was lying to us
November Rain will never end
no, oh no no,
'cause I won't let it
it's too comfortable to me
once the light has died out
I'm sweeping the window pane
picking up the broken pieces
of a lightbulb
that once shone proudly
above my weary mind
the story is done
the ink has dried
time left to repaint the day
a little blue with the grey
and I hinge on something you said
but I didn't hear it
and I connect my art to you
let it follow us to bed
tonight
and in the morning,
I'll blow it all away
and finally,
after all, finally
be with you
one hundred percent
of the time that's left
for me.

"Is any song worth singing if it doesn't help?" -- Wilco, 'Wishful Thinking'

Poetic Concept
Member

since 2006-06-25

Posts 66
God's Fingerprint

1 posted 2006-06-25 05:16 PM

"once the light has died out
I'm sweeping the window pane
picking up the broken pieces
of a lightbulb
that once shone proudly
above my weary mind
the story is done
the ink has dried
time left to repaint the day"

Excellent...I liked this considerably..wow
I think this is the best quotable I have read all day good job. keep writing...elevation is the key

Return the favor on: Swear to God

"How vain it is to sit down and write when u have not stood up to live"
Anonymous (Unknown)

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2006-06-25 08:01 PM

"and I hinge on something you said
but I didn't hear it
and I connect my art to you"

always a pleasure to read you

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