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James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2006-02-07 05:27 PM

crossing monday

they don’t make enough coffee
and the kind with a straw in it
all the sweet and lactose

trying to say morning is all right
or that damned french black
with chickory on its breath

now there’s a scene
me siting there like samson
on the morning after

while you pretend you
had no idea
even though you didn’t

oh it’s a pretty show
but every skit we do
has an armadillo in it

so galvanized by the thought
that somehow this time
he’ll come out of nowhere

surprise them all
make it all the way across
to the center line

~~J

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2006-02-07 06:28 PM

Jamie...

this crossing
made a whole lot of sense
to me.

Thank you.

K

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2006-02-07 06:31 PM

Excellent write..enjoyed the read so much.
Hugs~Nancy

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

3 posted 2006-02-07 06:53 PM

A most interesting and enjoyable read.

Andrew

exhale
Senior Member

since 2003-06-13

Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

4 posted 2006-02-07 08:40 PM

I'm pretty sure,
I loved this.

There was just something about it
that stung.
Which worked perfectly.
I just loved it.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2006-02-07 09:03 PM

Hi Jamie!

"surprise them all
make it all the way across
to the center line"

I caught some humor in this and also something sort of sad. Anyway, I liked it, especially the armadillo...lucky chap!

wvatvrider
Member

since 2006-02-04

Posts 78
West Virginia,USA

6 posted 2006-02-07 10:52 PM

nice write --
there "was" - a possum one time
in a blind curve, on the center line
lying dead
but another possum, smaller, alive
hovering about, close by
it's mate-perhaps-or a sibling
me blowing the horn,flickering headlights
nothing would drive it away
taking a chance,
I drove around it in the wrong lane
a blind curve
kerthump
I guess it could not survive the tragedy

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2006-02-08 04:08 PM

now there’s a scene
me siting there like samson
on the morning after

while you pretend you
had no idea
even though you didn’t

oh it’s a pretty show

I was completely lost in the pensive scene you'd set... then laughed out loud as the hapless armadillo made his entrance... I'm glad I wasn't in the process of drinking that coffee! LOL

This is fantastic!!

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

8 posted 2006-02-08 04:59 PM

Sometimes the cat has to show his claws . . .

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

9 posted 2006-02-08 06:04 PM

"they don’t make enough coffee
and the kind with a straw in it
all the sweet and lactose

trying to say morning is all right
or that damned french black
with chickory on its breath"

Oh I loved this one. Coffee is "food of the gods" and I loved...

"but every skit we do
has an armadillo in it"

Great write!

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