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As fingers touch and eyes walk away |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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A roof covered me then, when rains seldom fell and winds whistled lazily through open meadows of a mind cascading down a waterfall. But, now the shadow’s darkness no longer crawls across the floor, resting lazily upon the open hearth of my yearning... Why, I ask stubbornly? Why must the moon rise and rest upon the shoulder of a lonely heart? Why must the warm glow of yesterday’s sun crease the forehead of tomorrow and whisper softly as the bells of passionate wait chime beyond a distant knoll. Could you ever know, sense the pine of my lips, pursed beyond the resemblance of a kiss in wait? Could you? For I must cry out, releasing the prisoner of me that stands against the bars of wrought bewilderment...awaiting the moment when a key turns within my heart.....releasing me ....... for you. [This message has been edited by Magnus (01-10-2006 08:43 PM).] |
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Anne Shiever Junior Member
since 2006-01-10
Posts 21KS/USA |
I can picture rain and a waterfall in my head. I can also picture a man waiting for the woman of his dreams to come along and kiss him bringing him back to the here and now. This is a very moving piece of work. Anne Shiever |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
This poem is visualy delightful... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thank you, both of you....as you may see, romance is one of my favorite writes... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
This one has my muse's voice whispering an echo, but I can't make out the words. LOL, BJ, I guess I should just say, someday I'll come back to this one when I can translate the whisper words that are muffled tonight. Saving it.  ....jo |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
felt a whisper of magic in this, this was hauntingly beautiful...jars the soul into a vision of spiritual meaning...Barry...Barry, Barry, this was.......  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, I don't think you know how good this is. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
After reading this, I have to ask--do you paint by any chance? Not that you would need to when you can write like this, but it surely indicates an artist's eye. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry....this is very beautiful! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I am asking myself (I hesitate to ask you for fear of intruding) whether the release you refer to is death or courage (meaning the courage to contact her again). Beautiful poem, Magnus. I enjoy every one of the poems of yours that I have come across. - Owl |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
To me the release is a release from past demons that allow one to open up to love...  Wonderful Barry!"too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Ser....No, I don't paint..other than in my head where I see what I write. LeeJ...pleased this has aroused your curiousity... Susan, Diana..... Hard to explain.... the bondage is a mental bondage, mostly a courage issue, a lack of self confidence to jump out of the mental cell and become involved with the lady of his thoughts... The release is a personal thing....getting HIS actions to release him from the mental cell that he occupies... I write this way frequently...I think it is because love was a very elusive thing for me as a boy and young man...and I had to overcome obstacles that kept me away from that which I loved. Sorta like Dustin Hoffman.... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
With passion like this, who could resist? Corinne |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Absolutely beatuiful, Magnus. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
A beautiful piece of work... a pleasure to read. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I waited for the full moon... and it becomes all the more poignant, this write. . |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thanks for the explanation, Magnus. I agree with Corinne. How could she possibly resist you? Perhaps you should take the bull by the horns - perhaps you will find that the bull will show you a kind eye - and perhaps things will be a lot better with you and her than you imagine. If not, at least you will know. It is a terrible pity for you (and her) to miss out on what you could have, for want of trying. - Owl |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
There is so much movement of the spirit in "open meadows of a mind cascading down waterfalls." Enchanting imagery expressed in bells of passionate wait, and sorrow in "bars wrought of bewilderment" A beautifully strong poem! ~ Karen ~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sweet poet ... Happy Valentine's Day to you~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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