Open Poetry #37 |
Rescue |
DejaEntendu Member
since 2005-12-06
Posts 82Pennsylvania |
Hey everyone. First new poem in a while, wrote it this morning. Please let me know what you think of it. Ink stains and long nights, of running through the graveyard, where I used to live, where I wish you were. But if you'd like, I'll bury you with me, and burden you with my secrets, because the coffin gets cold, in the lonesome ground. The viewing is over now, so don't be shy, there's nobody here but me anymore, but you knew that- you were the undertaker. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
hmmm..interesting take on burial "I'll bury you with me, and burden you with my secrets," like those lines..but I prefer to carry only my own burdens with me...whenever M |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"because the coffin gets cold, in the lonesome ground" I agree... it's an interesting poem. |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
I liked this, though can't put my finger on why... I think it needs more mulling over! I like your PiP name too; my French is rusty but does it mean Already met? The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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