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Open Poetry #37

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Katerie
Member

since 2006-01-27

Posts 92
Central New York

0 posted 2006-01-29 10:36 AM

Alt, control, delete the moment,
Hands outstretched toward vacant jive.
A pink eraser, a drop of bleach,
Distorted sight on which to thrive.

Requiem aternam, eis,
Call another, distant song.
Jubilate deo, omnis',
Ancient text, it won't be long.

Figure eight, measured not,
A sign of what has yet to come;
Slashed down the middle, next to naught,
The new found glory of a broken drum.

Like a ship blown from it's mooringby a wind off the sea- I have been changed for good.

Katerie
Member

since 2006-01-27

Posts 92
Central New York

1 posted 2006-01-29 02:46 PM

Anyone?

-dies-

RedStoneEB
Senior Member

since 2003-06-08

Posts 772
uk

2 posted 2006-01-29 03:11 PM

alt control delete erasing what used to be

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

3 posted 2006-01-29 04:40 PM

I like the voice in your poem.

-Juju

-<>-~-<>-~-<>-
* Juju *
-<>-~-<>-~-<>-

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

4 posted 2006-01-30 12:37 PM

The second and certainly the third stanzas
deserve a better first.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

5 posted 2006-01-30 12:44 PM

Great write!

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

6 posted 2006-01-30 12:47 PM

"Requiem aternam, eis,
Call another, distant song.
Jubilate deo, omnis',
Ancient text, it won't be long."

Good write.

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