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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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My friend Diane At forty You can walk into a room And make any girl Nearly half your age disappear You still talk . . . About wanting the simple life And love which in fact Only makes one smile Knowing full well Only a millionaire paramour Or at least six figures Could ever have had This milkmaid in his bed Oh I can yet hear Your slender high heels— Clicking down the corridor . . . Toward that immaculate chateau by the sea |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your friend obviously knows what she wants ~ and how to get it! lol A cute and amusing write! Love & Light, EA |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Well done John. believe in what your heart feels... |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Great portrait. Good work. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Liked this vignette very much! |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Excellent... You are very good. Have you been published? |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thanks all reading, I don't like writing these kind of pieces still . . . Dominique-Simone, No, I see no point in publishing. Thanks again everyone for reading. John |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Yippppeeeee! I have found another poet who doesn't want to publish! Nobody seems to understand why I don't either. Not that there is anything wrong with doing so - but I believe that I have an excellent reason not to - simply that I don't want to. I enjoyed your portrait, John. - Owl |
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Anne Shiever Junior Member
since 2006-01-10
Posts 21KS/USA |
John, It expresses how a woman is filled with beauty at 40, and still knows what she wants from life to move steadily forward. Thanks for sharing... Anne Shiever |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
John and Owl, I mean no disrespect but can you please tell me why you don't want to be published. Is the point of writing not to share the way we see the world... the way we feel and think, with others and is that not what we are doing here? Thank you, The Lady |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Lady, That we’re doing it here, if that’s what we’re doing, is enough. I’m somewhat wary of why people then “publish”. Anytime, I've heard someone in common comment about being published it always seemed intent to strike a distinction if not superiority which is more than a little pathetic. Personally, my things do not share how “I” feel and think; they are as remote from the I that I usually am as they are from a man or woman next to me. I think Arnold’s “The Buried Life” has some sense here. They are like dreams of some “other” which if not immediately written down are soon lost and forgotten. Apart from coming through my brain and hand, (and whatever talents they’ve acquired to facilitate the journey without too much injury), “I” can make little claim to them. Indeed, anyone coming to me personally in quest of the source for the things I put down on paper or screen would in me be very disappointed. Apart from the present example above, which is something of an anomaly, (and which as I mentioned before I dislike), the things I do are usually not done as if addressing you or any other present audience. Whoever reads is doing so not as if they were facing the writer but rather looking over his shoulder; if you looked to your side you would find me standing beside you equally if not more curious. I should add I don’t put much value in this “I” notion, seeing it as a transient phenomenon; an accretion created by time and circumstance with little lost, when the time comes, in its passing. John |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
who could not help but love and admire a soul such as you describe John, this was a treasure...and so is the woman, you speak so fondly of. Hugs and thank you always for sharing. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you for your answer John. |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
whatever Sir Yi Huan did, John claimed the credit. Sir Yi Huan could be a true poet live in his cool poetic world but Sir John's life has always been driven by a heart bumping hot blood. you unwrapped yourself. good poem and I love it!! |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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