Open Poetry #37 |
Alanna |
Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
The rails were cold I could feel them through the soles of my shoes, Yet found comfort in the coolness, proof of life, Of living, today, unlike others, I wanted to be The imagined sound of his voice Had put me in a mood for remembering That had made my step a little lighter and my face a bit more flushed It wasn’t always like that, the memories Sometimes the exact same memory could invoke a wish for an end to the thinking Yet today they made me smile, wistfully longing for a time that seemed like perfection was an obtainable, tangible reality As so often happens in life, that perfection is short lived To the point where you often wonder if you imagined it But I knew he wasn’t imagined and what we had was my reward For what was still to come We always seem to pay for youth The invincibility of beauty, perceived wisdom and love Oh to be that ignorant again, I would surely give the second half Of this miserable life "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
nodding here "Like perfection was an obtainable, tangible reality As so often happens in life, that perfection is short lived " Know why that is? Well I'll tell ya. It's 'cause change is the only constant, and therefore the only state of perfection we can have acheive would have to factor in mutability. And I have no idea where that came from. I swear I just type the stuff. and yes, Alana... if I ever get past my slump, maybe agneline and lana can meet up. We could have a cat fight! (Guys just love cat fights... ) wink love this love you |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
*smile* you always get it. yes exactly, change. I would have to say that is more a good thing than not... and I am thankful for the moments of perfection. I love you much, Karen. LOL A cat fight?? yes...that is what guys love... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"...the invincibility of beauty, perceived wisdom and love Oh to be that ignorant again" ~ Youth truly is wasted on the young! Wonderful write, Susan! Linda |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
cat fight? got the scooter fired up..where ya gonna be scrappin? oh and the poem was way cool....the breeze of change just works it.. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This alone could start a serious philosophical discussion: Oh to be that ignorant again, I would surely give the second half Of this miserable life I am loving all of these, makes me feel like I am peeking into two diaries, Susan. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"We always seem to pay for youth The invincibility of beauty, perceived wisdom and love Oh to be that ignorant again, I would surely give the second half Of this miserable life" So much insight and wisdom in this, Susan. I really had a chore picking out my favorite lines; there were so many good ones. ...jo |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
quote:Susan this truly made me smile through a ton of my own nostalgic bs you know? Trust me when I tell you as you aren't old enough yet, you will truly be that ignorant again, I know I am! It's wonderful all over again. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Enjoyed this very much, Susan. Ditto to littlewing. It could make for an extremely interesting and long discussion. - Owl |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"We always seem to pay for youth The invincibility of beauty, perceived wisdom and love Oh to be that ignorant again, I would surely give the second half Of this miserable life" Me too Susan..me too! In the midst of winter, |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"Oh to be that ignorant again,..." Yes, it does have its own allure. oh...and...ummm...what's a cat fight? :} |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"We always seem to pay for youth The invincibility of beauty, perceived wisdom and love" Well said. Good work. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Hiya Myrtle. Sorry I'm late in getting here but what with all the naps and such, it's been hard to find the time, yanno? So, you weren't sure about this one. I trust you've reconsidered? "Character" poetry requires a connection that not all writers can make. You not only made it, you made it (her) very real, as witnessed by those who've read this and said they relate to it (in so many words). Ya done good. Told ya so. How come you doubt me? Still, after all these thousands of times, when I've been right and you've been deluded... |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
The invincibility of beauty, perceived wisdom and love Oh to be that ignorant again, I would surely give the second half Of this miserable life Yes, I would love to go back to the age of innocence, my mind could be free of knowing what i know, taking more risks, and being able to love without scars~ Great Poem Susan, these are the feelings your poem made me feel as I read it~ ~ARH |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all.. And Dunc? I think "all those times" you have been right is a slight overstatement don't ya think? "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
So? I'm to understand perfection is NOT obtainable? (and I was getting so close....LMAO) Oh yeah!...Great reading! (writing?) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL at Duncan's reply. Seriously, this Alanna stuff? well, I'm stuffing this treasure into the library. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Oh to be that ignorant again, Yes, I think I liked being naive much better, too! Love this, Susan. misce |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
We always seem to pay for youth... ~*~ Oh, in so many ways.... and now on to the Pup's particles.... |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
Awww. It seems as if only the good things in life are short lived. I think that is why we charish them most. Nice write, Kristabell |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ed~ You simply can't catch what doesn't exist.. yet I think we each have in our mind that which makes us happy (or would/will) and that is those moments that make us beleive it does exist...and most times, that is enough. thank you all for reading. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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