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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest 
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he could have just slipped into the river after all he was tired but he jumped deep cold dark water quiet place not silent but quiet he floated up to green dappled water warm I answer no more questions Feel no more feelings Think no more thoughts Make no more decisions he rested in the water becoming a thought singing a leaving song praying a green forever prayer slid quietly around the hard smooth wisdom of rocks floating toward the sea toward no more then the river branched |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Now that's not bad Not bad at all John |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Laughing. Thank you John. |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
Reminds me of android 17's work choked |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I enjoyed the dark journey of this poem, but somehow feel it may be crossing over the guidelines if I am reading it correctly, so I am very glad I got to read it. A very vivid depiction in this one, and enjoyable read. "There's nothing worse that being an aging young person!" - Richard Pryor ~ Carpe' Diem ~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I've been away, almost nonexistent here, during the month since you joined. Now I regret it even more, because I didn't get to say a proper hello to someone who writes magic. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I came back to read this again, and see how many ways this could be taken, which of course makes it even that much better!  I like it too! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Sad, sensitive and beautifully woven. - Owl |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you for reading me RedStone. Magic, Ratleader? Thank you so much. I'm glad you read it again Mysteria. Thank you kindly Owl. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
he rested in the water becoming a thought singing a leaving song praying a green forever prayer slid quietly around the hard smooth wisdom of rocks I love these descriptions great job!!! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you so much Page.  |
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