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Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time

0 posted 2006-05-18 11:00 AM


One of my 90's stuff - My Father's Son I'll write more.

It is complete freelancing and not about anything more than images and translation of feeling and thoughts that you do stop and think about people's attitudes to people, when they feel they have control.

Mr L. Cohen and his songs came in around this time.

Dave

The dance of my dreams
From which I never woke
In your eyes
My life
No hope
Within you I live
For when the blackness comes
For you have become
My mother
And I my father's son

When they took me
My poems saved me
Because you could translate my vision
And tell my story
I was old
You were young
We were ageless
We had no choice
I had no hope
They circled the tent
As we loved
To hear you groan
My life on your breath
As custom dictated


You walked in a distant sunset and suns glistened and they chose to shine in your hair

You spun in my eyes colours I could never understand as you took the fragrance of the mist twisted to a cloak hiding light

You walked in darkness as a fear a threat a danger

You were a whisp in a thought in an image in substance enveloping yourself

You approached in light in darkness in power

Picked up in one hand I had to

made some approach at the beginning as power corrupts and absolute power corrupts absolutely

And we never acknowledge that power wanes

And strength develops

And thoughts always exist and don’t forget


© Copyright 2006 Dave Page - Cirencester UK - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2006-05-18 12:32 PM


"You spun in my eyes colours I could never understand as you took the fragrance of the mist twisted to a cloak hiding light"

I am keeping that line

Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time
2 posted 2006-05-18 12:37 PM


I confine this stuff to whatever Midnight

Problem is I start writing

Get a call about a contract

And I have gone multi-dimensional

and gets quotes like

"'this is the strangest conversation' I have heard", as I come down to some really nasty IT Agent's games.

dave

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just out of reach
3 posted 2006-05-18 01:26 PM


You were a whisp in a thought in an image in substance enveloping yourself

You approached in light in darkness in power


I think that this might be my favourite write of yours Dave. For some reason the words reached out and grabbed hold of me .. a memory perhaps..who knows..but I like it.

hugs, Chris

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
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4 posted 2006-05-18 01:58 PM


When they took me
My poems saved me
Because you could translate my vision
And tell my story
I was old
You were young
We were ageless
We had no choice
I had no hope
They circled the tent
As we loved
To hear you groan
My life on your breath
As custom dictated


I loved the entire poem/freelance, this was indeed astounding...really held me close...

amazing!!!

Bodger
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Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time
5 posted 2006-05-18 02:56 PM


I keep having to understand that what I feel about my writing has nothing to do with reality of the people who read

Again and again I freelance, brain dump, take something I feel is nothing and then sometimes the words flow and I throw them away but because of how I screw up my backups I often end up with the good stuff because places like 'Piptalk' and 'The Scroll' kept my words for me.

To say I owe a debt is to look at a volcano and say 'that is nice'

People have almost protected me from myself in keeping words

I am indebt

To those people

Dave Page (Sir Dave of Tag on the Scroll), Dave Page and Bodger here.

Thanks to everone

Dave

froggy
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since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893
Michigan
6 posted 2006-05-19 07:26 AM


Another fine piece of word art you wrote.

:-)

Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things,
man will not himself find peace."

Albert Schweitzer,
Nobel Peace Prize Wi

Bodger
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Tolerance for a short time
7 posted 2006-05-19 03:45 PM


Froggy

You are an old friend, I hope things are going as you would wish.

Thank you for your words.

Dave

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