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themute
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0 posted 2006-05-17 10:31 PM


Far reaching thoughts for which I am somber
Thinking of her and those lips no fairer
She finds me a friend so still I wonder
For I love her so I will not snare her
Would she take my love for her truthfully
Would we make hot eyes with our passion?
Instead with eyes hot bitter scrutiny
Such saddness is true with unseen fashion
A wish for a dream makes me a dreamer
Dreams are for gone within realms never seen
Yet dreams have come true for I have seen her
My story is older no sadder has been
      I spend my time my love for her hidden
      No greater love than the one that’s forbidden



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1 posted 2006-05-17 11:16 PM


*wow*
I loved this!!
total keeper

‘I want to swim away
but don’t know how
sometimes it feels
just like I’m falling
in the ocean’
~Blue October

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2 posted 2006-05-18 08:53 PM


You did a wonderful job with this one.
TD

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3 posted 2006-05-19 07:07 PM


and now
I've had the pleasure
of enjoying all three
beautiful love writes
unrequited can be
such poetry

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4 posted 2006-05-19 07:30 PM


I don't know much about sonnets and the way they're supposed to be...but no matter, I really loved the rhythm and feel of this love song!
themute
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5 posted 2006-05-19 08:49 PM


thank you all, I learned how to write in sonnet form only a few days ago but have now decided to write a whole cycle of them(a group of 100 or so) all of them as good as the last I hope.


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