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themute
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0 posted 2006-05-11 08:43 PM



Out in your yard
You see a whole in the side near the house
You walk over and look inside
Put your hand in the whole
Drive it down to the bottom scraping  
Getting wet dirt underneath your fingernails
Scoop out the dirt that you have in your hand
Look at the clumps of the dark brown and reddish

Putting your hand back in the whole
Now scrape your hand on the side
There is a rock so real that it hurt your hand
And you try to pull it out
You tug it back and forth
Pulling it out straight from the dirt
You look at it in achievement
It’s much longer than you felt it to be
Now toss the bolder away

You’re looking in the whole
It is as deep as the victimized soul
Take it out your flower and fill in the void  
The whole has been filled without money or sin
The perfect planting
A summer day  


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Gaia
1 posted 2006-05-11 08:51 PM


Grinning here, as I loved the imagery.
But shouldn't it read 'hole' not whole?

passing shadows
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2 posted 2006-05-11 08:51 PM


nice concept
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3 posted 2006-05-11 09:27 PM


all that dirt under the nails is not a cool
thing,  but the message you give us is
crystal clear!!!

The Lady
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4 posted 2006-05-11 11:01 PM



I actually felt the rock on my hands and nails. Nice work!


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