Open Poetry #37 |
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perfect function poetry |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738![]() |
Eliminate the pronouns and just cleave a figure of infinity upon a pond of ice and leave as one lone skater eats the eights and drowns without a rail... perfect function poetry and snow is all the evidence upon a pond of ice and leaves are frozen in the silences until the young boy on the skates casts his bait in spring catching more than sticks and weights astonished by his lack of bait; he'd used a piece of gum. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
it is truely in the eyes of the beholder...that gaze upon the unseen which is there... Good Morning Lady So delightful to have been my first read of the day...wishing you the best Hugs Me |
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Liz Sinclair Member
since 2006-05-06
Posts 93Atlantis |
I liked the transition from cold/lifelessness to warm/vibrancy. Very nice piece. Thanks for sharing. Liz...Carpe Diem |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Eliminate the pronouns and just cleave a figure of infinity" That line speaks volumes... I confess I have an ideal of what this might be about but I can't be sure... I am thinking spring might produce things never intended? ![]() Love you lady. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
oh my, but I can chew on this'un all day and come back for more tonight! ![]() you don't even need adjectives or pronouns just a few sparse words from you, and it's gourmet food for thought but when you throw in some hot sauce? ![]() |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Hey! Don't mind me I am just following Kacey around this morning. You wonder why I don't bother to write anymore? This is why, you have more to say in a few lines than I can come up with in an epic novel. ![]() |
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