Open Poetry #37 |
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A Hostile Land (2003) |
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poettothecars Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093New Zealand ![]() |
3341 A Hostile Land 24 November 2003 In a land were hostilities stir A place of the mind as it were This state of good and evil born As if death was a memory in spirit to mourn There was unrest like in a sleepless night Set out in a mixture of rotations left to right Far be it to battle through a dark shadow of force To awake from this universe made aware of an external course a poet who cares [This message has been edited by poettothecars (05-07-2006 05:34 AM).] |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
MMM...not bad...perhaps a few things might be changed but i quite like it..thank you.. Goldenrose. ''As the deer pants for steams of water, so my soul pants for you O God'' |
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poettothecars Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093New Zealand |
Thank you for your views. I will admit it is not one of my best and I have found that the last 12 months of mixing with fellow poets across the world by way of the Internet has improved my writing and include more than one change to the way I compose my verse now a poet who cares |
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