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Some Paths
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Some Paths |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Some Paths Some paths are like a thorny rose Those thwart the hand and please the nose They victimize the eyes in hue And prick some blood for payment due Some paths are lit with stars of bright Those light the wonders of the night That holds you in a trance of chance The nuance of a fiddlers dance The music plays the beat of leaves That titillates the heart in tease And magnifies the senses high In sate that heaves the sound of sigh I’ve wondered down this road of yellow And touched the bare of fair and mellow With payment of a piece of soul A tuppence for this piece of goal And still this old man walks in vie With still a twinkle in his eye |
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poettothecars Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093New Zealand |
This one is not as good as an earlier one I read The flow is not the same and the rhyme feels forced I am sure others will love your writing, only I felt I would give my honest view point a poet who cares |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Morning Sy...  and I can hear that twinkle in your voice...loved this...a great way to end the week.... thank you Sy... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Some paths are lit with stars of bright Those light the wonders of the night That holds you in a trance of chance The nuance of a fiddlers dance" Sy! You make me want to dance a jig! And, I see that twinkle in your eye.  Have a fine weekend m'friend. Here..let me pour you a fresh cup of Chai tea.   &  , Nancy~ Trace my body with your words, |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Seymour...I've been down that path myself a few times. Enjoyed your morning stroll...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
poettothecars, Sorry about that, thank you for the comment. LeeJ Thank you and good morning sweety. Nancy Thank you for the tea. Paul, Most of us have, thank you my friend. |
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poettothecars Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093New Zealand |
Seymour In a way I can be sorry for being so harsh in my comments above and I know you have posted a lot of poetry on this site and made many good friendships Sure in many cases, the sharing with others is a personal part and should be given credit If I showed you my own poems from the year 2000, or even those going back perhaps only 18 months ago, many are not as good as they could be I have seen a progress in my own writing, in just the last 12 months because of interaction with fellow poets over the world wide web When I am not sure what I am saying here, except I know you have talent and a good mind some days may not quite workout and I am lucky that these days I can whack out a poem in two to three minutes and move on to the next without much of a correction or edit I realize what comes natural to me and is self taught does not work for everyone that same way a poet who cares |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
poettothecars No need for apology, I have written allot of bad poetry in fact I'm not sure I wrote any good. LOL But thank you for the extra comment. |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Gather the rosebuds while ye may.... LOL Sy, that twinkle will withstand many a vivid hue, and I'm betting the blooms are worth the thorns and then some! hugs, Klassy |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
many paths... I choose the one with less drama these days your poem started me thinking Sy that's what good poetry does |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Seymour, your poetry is always so beautiful. You are one of the best poets, I know. I always enjoy reading your poetry. I am glad you have that twinkle in your eye. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Sy, When we wear those glasses of rose, It matters not which path we chose. Each path has much to offer And adds much to the coffer. Best from a faithful reader, a slack at posting, martyjo |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Klassy, I have gathered the rose buds weather I may or may not. LOL Thank you dear. passing, You can make drama of any path you take. LOL SmartChick My eye is twinklimg at you. latearrival I'm still adding to the coffer. LOL Thank you |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
LOL I sure don't like bumps in the road and have adopted the theory that silence is golden, though at times, it's real hard to hold the tongue I love everything you write...always have...always will |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Your poetry always has such vigor and wisdom...good to read you again Sir Sy ~ Hugs!~ Love this~~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear "See More" "Some paths are like a thorny rose Those thwart the hand and please the nose" I have walked these paths many times. I see your paths in this poem but there are writers on this site who have no paths, wandering in a jungle of words with no compass and no sense of direction. To use a biblical term, they are lost! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Most of us here, long time or short realize good caring poetry when we read it... You are always of good form...a not so easy thing to do. Love reading you and miss it when you are not with us. Thank you for your consistancy.  M p.s. it's not the timing of creating that makes a poet enjoyable to read...it's the content and intent of which you have both. Always and again |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Honeybee My pleasure to see you here, thank you. BROTHER JOHN If they are lost they will be recycled as we and it will all work out in the end. Thank you my brother. Maureen, You have always been a favorite of mine. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"And still this old man walks in vie With still a twinkle in his eye" Take the path with heart... ~ Don Juan Matus There's clearly heart in your path Sy. Wonderful, though provoking poem. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lady I am taking the heart path and I do hear the harps playing. But they are confined to my dreams. Thank you |
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