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Silence Speaks Loudly
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Silence Speaks Loudly |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
This is another poem under construction, as all mine are. I invite you to help me improve it. Silence Speaks Loudly `Twas written by the wise in times of old That the stilled fleshly sheathed tongue loudly speaks; And silence echoes midst the mountain peaks With words not said, yet many ways retold! Between each line, each word and surd untold, "Thoughts" boldly speak which hide near rosy cheeks And quietly fly.The unsaid then streaks Across the way far from its minded mold! Life's earthly travels bring us face to face And with embroided words.We stitch each thread Defining selves with speech of proper grace. The heart hears better from the fountain's head And what's afire between each surd's embrace Doth kindle hearths aflame by what's unsaid! |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
"fleshly sheathed"? perhaps freshly was intended. "surd" now thats a word i had to look up, made me think. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
How happy I am to have seen this one. Nicely done. Silence can be very loud and clear, while words becomes babble. Rae |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I have learned the language of silence myself sometimes it's harsher than words |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Time, Thank you for reading this and your comments. I used the world fleshly as an adjective to tongue. It may be redundant since the tongue is flesh. However, this simply is a poetic means of expression. I hope this helps clear up what I meant. Blessings on you my fellow traveler!!! |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Sand, Thank you for your kind remarks. Silence maybe good or bad. The context will determine this as you know. Too, words can be very deceiving as you know. So it goes both ways. Thanks for your time. BJ |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Passing Shadows, You have blessed me with your presence. Yes, silence may work in many ways. I think of the times I have been around people who were in deep hurt. They were beyond crying, and words. Just sitting with them in silence and maybe the touch of the hand or embrace, too, spoke from heart to heart and WOW, this is clearly heard and helps the wounded soul heal. The riches blessings of live continue to rest upon you and give you peace!!! |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
Brother, Perhaps I looked no further than my nose and should have delved further. Thank you for the explanation. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Silence speaks loudly indeed BROTHER JOHN. Thank you for this thought provoking piece. |
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WindWalker Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218 |
This is thought provoking; and well crafted too. |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
TO THE LADY: Thank you again for your words of kindness. You may not remember, but you were the first to send me a response for my first post. You have been most gracious and helpful ever since. You are truly A LADY!! |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear WindWalker, I thank you for such kind remarks. I am fairly new at this and invite all the constructive help that is offered. Any time you see a better way of expressing something, please inform me since you are a gifted writer. Thanks again. |
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