Open Poetry #37 |
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What Was |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart ![]() |
![]() What Was What was that show, or was it a play, perhaps a skit…something about a brain, unplugged. So much can fill a brain. Thought alone, troubles, alone, things that are not mineral, vegetable, but intangible. So much can fill a brain. Yet, we [you, and I] talk, whisper, fear, abhor writer’s block. And sometimes we cannot discern why this mountain is but a heart still in hold yet desires to leap, what is with the stay, come, listen, I am not imagining things… something is wrong but nothing shows. Little Words. I know. Something is wrong. I feel. Odd. Snippets of honest. Tracks evaporate. I come around. Calendar weight could decide different. I knew I confided. But to whom? Do they understand? Will who I was come home again? ~*~ Any answer to the above, if not a yes, could be, should be, when on the cusp of moon as it leaves as it returns; so shall she, and then, I. ~*~ © Karilea Rilling Jungel April 30, 2006 |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Whatever, it will be blessed! :-) Beautiful write Sunny One! :-) |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"things that are not mineral, vegetable, but intangible" Incredible Sunshine. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you for this very intimate, interesting wandering through your mind. I can relate very well. The questioning, wondering, vascilating analyses, not being able to put a finger on it, but knowing it (something? what thing?) - is there - or not there - reaching out for the elusive what? . . . Thinking - no matter whether positively or negatively - enriches us, deepens us - and no, I don't think it is possible to return to the same . . . but that it is sometimes possible to reach a better, wiser, unimagined result . . . wishing you the courage, wisdom, determination, hope, faith and tranquility to do so. Your Critique thingy says: "Tell me what pulled you in here to read, and what you may be taking away . . ." What pulled me in is firstly that it was YOUR poetry; secondly the fascination of the title - it held so many possibilities - I expected it to be purely nostalgia, which I would have enjoyed immensely, but as it so happened I enjoyed this more than immensely. What I am taking away is a pausing in my life, in my thought, and a feeling of being older (and I love being old - I am 60 - and love even more being older)and wiser and a little sadder (though I can't put my finger on exactly why) and deeper and more enriched. Thank you for the experience. - Owl |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love the snippets and flashes of thought here Karilea. Expertly released onto the page. Happy May Day! ![]() Hugs~Nancy |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
"And sometimes we cannot discern why this mountain is but a heart" Sometimes the stone of mountains are very soft and molten at the center... Will who I was come home again?" Karilea, this just leaves me re-reading in awe! Parts of me seem lost forever, and you pen such grace to thoughts I can't speak or write. This is a stunning poem, truly lovely. ~ Karen |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
i like this Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
Sunshine Where block starts How we try to avoid I look at the world It calls to write A camera takes an image for a second A word takes a second for an image Dave |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
always making me think ![]() |
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Mr»ÄlleÿÇät Member
since 2001-06-02
Posts 190 |
Thought provoking piece ![]() |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
I would like to know what started this thought process?...I enjoyed reading it..but always like a starting point..thank you karilea... Goldenrose. ''As the deer pants for steams of water, so my soul pants for you O God'' |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Excellent write! Eric |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
oh I love this...the whole thing, but the ending...it is not just she and thee...it is also I...sigh |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Wonderful read Karilea. :-) Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things, |
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