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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2006-01-18 08:34 AM

Who Do You Pity?

Who do you pity of me and of you?
Which has the more laden heart of the two?
The one who has loved you through long empty years
Or the one whose regrets hold the bitterest tears?

Which one will be more contently reposed
When the last breath is drawn and cold eyelids are closed?
The one who has paid the most heart wrenching cost
Or the one who was blind to the love that was lost?

At the end of the journey, one carries a debt
For the one dies in love and the one with regret
If God were to grant one more lifetime to choose
I would welcome the option to love and to lose

But the deepest bereavement through torrents of tears
Is of sweet treasured time turned to long wasted years

Elizabeth Santos

Martie

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1 posted 2006-01-18 08:39 AM

Liz

"At the end of the journey, one carries a debt
For the one dies in love and the one with regret
If God were to grant one more lifetime to choose
I would welcome the option to love and to lose"

I would too!

[This message has been edited by Martie (01-18-2006 09:52 AM).]

Marge Tindal

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2 posted 2006-01-18 08:59 AM

SweetLizzyLady~
Clutches the heart of long-remember and squeezes real tight~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Startime55
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3 posted 2006-01-18 10:49 AM

WOW!!! I agree whole heartedly....wisdom flows from heart and soul making the reader take a look at what they have .... Magnificent...**big hugs**

Mysteria

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4 posted 2006-01-18 11:59 AM

Absolutely! Beautiful Lizzy. (See my signature sweet cheeks?)

"There's nothing worse that being an aging young person!" - Richard Pryor
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Nan

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5 posted 2006-01-18 12:07 PM

Well I know this - I sure love ya...

Constance
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6 posted 2006-01-18 02:23 PM

Beautiful and true. I love it!

smiles,
Constance

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2006-01-18 02:44 PM

Elizabeth,
Excellent

elpoeta
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8 posted 2006-01-18 03:11 PM

Great Stuff! "If God were to grant one more lifetime to choose
I would welcome the option to love and to lose", excellent verse!!

My only question is why if you choose to love and lose does it all turn to "wasted years"?

Mike

mighty mouth
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9 posted 2006-01-18 03:53 PM

incredibly strong language. it's arranged fluently.

serenity blaze
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10 posted 2006-01-18 04:00 PM

I read your words as I prepare to attend services for my Aunt, who passed away Monday morning.

My family has indeed suffered many losses these past five years, and it is serendipitous that I read your grace today, as I was just thinking that I still don't know what to say to be of any comfort.

But I wanted you to know that recently I had an epiphany of sorts. I have made a conscious decision to celebrate the lives of my loved ones, even as I allow myself to selfishly mourn their absence.

I was blessed to be born into a large, loving family, and I would not trade one minute of the joy of knowing them to erase a year of grief.

So I can smile too, and say, "No, don't pity me--I am one of the lucky ones."

I have been blessed by much love in my life, and today, your poem, your words, with all of your grace and wisdom spoke the message I couldn't seem to give in words.

Thank you Liz--for although I doubt you meant this for me personally, I will carry it with me in my heart.

You are so lovely.

Enchantress
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11 posted 2006-01-18 04:03 PM

Excellent write dear Elizabeth.
I so much enjoy your work.
Hugs~Nancy

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

LeeJ
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12 posted 2006-01-19 11:34 AM

At the end of the journey, one carries a debt
For the one dies in love and the one with regret
If God were to grant one more lifetime to choose
I would welcome the option to love and to lose
excellent verbage, adding, it is in life we celebrate...

Liz, your such a talented poetess...this was bittersweetly toned....

vandana

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13 posted 2006-01-19 05:54 PM

good read

LngJhnAg
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14 posted 2006-01-19 06:21 PM

Liz - Your poems are ALWAYS so well written and so true. You are an incredible poet and person. It is a pleasure to read your words, but a real devil to emulate your talent. Can't be done.

nakdthoughts
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15 posted 2006-01-19 06:28 PM

an absolutely beautiful write...and so true~~

Hope you are well

M

SmartChick
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16 posted 2006-01-19 07:44 PM

As always, this is beautiful. Just like you.

shades of paul
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17 posted 2006-01-19 08:53 PM

A good write....paul

shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

miscellanea
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18 posted 2006-01-19 08:59 PM

I feel the ache in this! Good questions upon which to reflect...

Striking poem, Elizabeth.

~misc~

kevinbrianwright
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19 posted 2006-01-20 06:17 AM

Lovely poem.

Kevin Brian Wright

skyshine

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20 posted 2006-01-20 09:24 AM

Very true....and you can't experience love without it bringing some loss is well...it just happens that way!

~sky

I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying....
~Tim McGraw

Cerenity
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21 posted 2006-01-21 11:22 PM

Hi Liz,

All I guess I can say is serenity blaze said so very much that I too feel, and that I am in awe of the pure beauty and honesty your poetry reveals, this one I shall treasure so very much.

Love, Cerenity

iliana
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22 posted 2006-01-21 11:28 PM

Liz, no matter what you write, it is always equisite. What a beautiful heart you have! ....jo

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