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| Open Poetry #37 |
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Boss Of My Heart |
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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
"Boss Of My Heart" 05/04/06 Well you're nowhere to be found, & I've been all over town. Now this yellow cab's taking me home, For another night alone. With a (smitgen) of liqour, Too much booze whatever. my bleeding heartstring's quivering some. Tell me why am I so Dumb? You played me, & you played me good. Should have known by your evil look. But underneath, You put a spell on me... What A Witch You've Become, Since My Princess Has Gone. What Fean Paved Me A Fool, & Made Me Act So Cruel? My Soul's No Restaurante. I'm Not Your Magic Wand. Stop Hypnotizing me, & Billing The Air I Breathe. Cause Though You Think You Are, There's No Boss Of My Heart. The monthly leash has tun out, Eviction's covered the house. I've packed my bags & boxed up your stuff. Goodbye my devilish dove. I've said: "Au Revior." To it all, Left no number which to call. So go find yourself another knight, With a fetish for small tights. Hook: Chorus: Hallo new beginning! Hallo Wonderful life! This is gonna be great. I'm feeling five by five. Cause once & for all I'm free, For there's no her where there's me. Now after this day, I'll never again have to hear Myself say... Chorus: |
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Musicmaker1969 
since 2000-06-25
Posts 589Peterborough, Ontario Canada |
Sounds like a lot of pain in this song/poem. But it does not rhyme very well. I kind of got lost in it. But I sure can sense the emotions involved so you did very well there. Good job. Just work on rhythm and rhyme a little would be my advice. Sheri Adams Jesus lives in my heart! He can in yours too!!! |
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