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0 posted 2006-04-14 11:19 PM



"Boss Of My Heart"
05/04/06

Well you're nowhere to be found,
& I've been all over town.
Now this yellow cab's taking me home,
For another night alone.

With a (smitgen) of liqour,
Too much booze whatever.
my bleeding heartstring's quivering some.
Tell me why am I so Dumb?

You played me, & you played me good.
Should have known by your evil look.
But underneath,
You put a spell on me...

What A Witch You've Become,
Since My Princess Has Gone.
What Fean Paved Me A Fool,
& Made Me Act So Cruel?
My Soul's No Restaurante.
I'm Not Your Magic Wand.
Stop Hypnotizing me,
& Billing The Air I Breathe.
Cause Though You Think You Are,
There's No Boss Of My Heart.

The monthly leash has tun out,
Eviction's covered the house.
I've packed my bags & boxed up your stuff.
Goodbye my devilish dove.

I've said: "Au Revior." To it all,
Left no number which to call.
So go find yourself another knight,
With a fetish for small tights.

Hook:

Chorus:

Hallo new beginning! Hallo Wonderful life!
This is gonna be great. I'm feeling five by five.
Cause once & for all I'm free,
For there's no her where there's me.
Now after this day,
I'll never again have to hear
Myself say...

Chorus:

© Copyright 2006 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2006-04-15 12:25 PM


Sounds like a lot of pain in this song/poem.  But it does not rhyme very well.  I kind of got lost in it.  But I sure can sense the emotions involved so you did very well there.  Good job.  Just work on rhythm and rhyme a little would be my advice.

Sheri Adams

Jesus lives in my heart!  He can in yours too!!!
Sheri Liegh Adams
sheriliegh@sympatico.ca

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