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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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You came and crossed that line all wise and wonderful like pocket aces, easy on the eyes. I loved the way you walked, and walked me through. But reality is seen through double vision and the poor souls you felt the need to appease to find their way and see clearly. And to think you had me once. Your simple game plays out the same hand time and time again so much is lost to you and your dream lovers. And real time doesn't add up. Like a shot of Jack, straight up you burn going down and make for a hefty side bet. Just maybe, a spade isn't really a spade. But it didn't matter how long I held out or how many times I called you I couldn't win for losing. Embarrassed After sitting out for so long and every breath that I've held why I ever delt myself in. Knowing it wouldn't make any difference. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
 I get to be first!this is real smooth, like a misty bourbon, and a salty finish...  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Well, that was fun! Gee, thanks for going first Reb~ I sure do appreciate your feedback! |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
I can't imagine you not making a difference in everything you touch BluesSerenade, not after reading this. It burned going down but made me smile when it hit bottom! :-) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
As Reb wrote...very smooth~~ I haven't been able to stay up late enough to catch you on here anymore (either a sign of older age...or just plain tired these days) hugs and love M |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
What Brother Steve said, word for word....with the first few in italics, just for me. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...I agree with Ed and Steve concerning your content... I do love the honest feelings you always bring to your poetry!  |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Bluesy, Felt like it was on the rocks to me. But then I'm not a drinker. Lot's of cool stuff in this write. I'll always love your writing. Hope all is well. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Always a pleasure to read you, dear Bluesy! Everything we say and do makes a difference one way or another. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Hey Bluesy  so nice to read you again!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lori! You're back!  "Like a shot of Jack, straight up you burn going down and make for a hefty side bet." ~ Got some nice country blues goin' on here! Sending you a great big welcome-back hug! Linda  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you tell it straight up, and oftentimes with a twist of brine but lovin it and the blondes are back  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"Like a shot of Jack, straight up you burn going down and make for a hefty side bet." Now that is a best of show verse if I ever read one. Great stuff! |
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Androgynous Member
since 2006-04-08
Posts 71 |
"Embarrassed After sitting out for so long and every breath that I've held why I ever delt myself in. Knowing it wouldn't make any difference." What an end to a lovely read, much enjoyed Love "How happy is the blameless vestal's lot! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Hey Bluesy... I am going to ditto the verse Icy called out.. Well done. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Bluesy, now this is some real blues....so well written....saving it! *hugs*...jo |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Got to agree with EA and icebox... great verses there and oh, so hard hitting. You can sure tell it Blues. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Always love reading you, Bluesy. Your words touch. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
 Lori....sometimes even being delt those pocket aces we never win....sigh....hits home, good to see you, lovin how you write so much truth....hugsss you And so it those we live with |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
its not always what we have but what we could possible gain .... sometimes waiting is how its just played. ... other than your thoughts, was there a wild card? lol Hello again, naturally!! CT |
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