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conversational silence |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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We spoke indepth of death and lust the fruitless quest for answers of questions we have yet to form and we cried remembering the broken oaths of ever and a day, and since and since, and since-- what did you say? there was nothing left to wish we sat silent in the dark exhaling smoke and uselessness like commas and superlatives and exclamation marks. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Nice poetic thought-shot. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
In round, rough table sought jest and gist of words long brought a flame of life, a flame for-bear'd where in mist, a silence flared... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"we sat silent in the dark exhaling smoke and uselessness like commas and superlatives and exclamation marks." This brings to my mind some very strong visuals of my own. Loved the title. *hugs*.....jojo |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
liked this much and much. *hug* xx farewell the ash-tray girl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Superbly done! But then, Serenity Blaze, have you ever written anything in any other way than superbly? Nostalgia, pain, truth, honesty and realisation painted with delicate brushstrokes into a cameo of perfection. Hoping that it was cathartic and wishing I could think of something of worth to say that would make you feel warm and fuzzy inside, because I hate that you are in so much pain. - Owl |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Me too - I hate to see the hurt even if it is written well.  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"there was nothing left to wish we sat silent in the dark exhaling smoke and uselessness like commas and superlatives and exclamation marks." Yes, I know this situation only too well and the underlying sadness but you have written it out extremely well and sometimes that helps. I hope it has for you. Helen |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
what did you say? there was nothing left to wish ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Doncha hate it!!!! you always express yourself so nice, serenity~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity....I wrote of the same kind of thing once...here: /main/forumdisplay.cgi?action=displayarchive&number=88&topic=000347  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
, exponentially ! |
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Androgynous Member
since 2006-04-08
Posts 71 |
Intense, and silent longing, so sad, well done, you almost made me cry, but just nearly  Love "How happy is the blameless vestal's lot! |
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