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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{than black} box of night--closed a never stirred lake to press against its cheek a moment slow taken I imagine being alone stretched across the skin of rivers a drop of dew through glass the hands of trees, of green -- even fall like memory between storms I lay waiting, listening -- I pray for the dream to remember: the moment green (for the sea) touched blue (for the sky) around such edges of evenings where the sky dances ~ I must mention we are made of fragments we drift -- leave imprints-- walk the journey -- trying to touch it all on silver wings we try to touch the rivers bend the season of air between palm and prayer the press of body between grain and sand --- yes that moment--this moment-- such as memories these memories, that which I've become pale ash reflections of dawn-- darkness of stolen nights ~ no matter where this all began it ends here --on the edge of soul in you, in me laced with remnant stars when I touched your hands to the grace of clay having lost my soul slow the rain will fall once again on mirrored lake while I drift in some passing memory somewhere-- a crumble of stone returns to calm ~~**~~ And so it those we live with and should know who elude us But we can still love them we can love completely without complete understanding [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-30-2006 11:35 PM).] |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"laced with remnant stars when I touched your hands to the grace of clay having lost my soul" Wow. And that's all I can say! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
hmmmm purdy stuff purdy one.. enjoyed it lady lauren |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren...You poetry always leaves me sighing...this is just beautiful!  |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Elegant Greeneyes! Such depth and beauty!:-) |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Lauren...in that picture you have up...those eyes are stunning! and the words...as always, move me in and to places I didn't know were there... and now I want to throw on my suit and go soak up some rays at the beach..  but I have homework to do!!! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Exquisite as always lovely Lauren. Another keeper for my library. Hugs~Nancy ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your words are as stunning as the eyes that now show so beautifully in your new photo!  Happy spring hugs, from Blueeyes |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
To leave Martie in a sign about covers it all and I could not top that compliment. Beautiful Lauren, as usual. Pure poetry. Waste not a second ~ Carpe' Diem |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality |
Stunning poetry,very good,....paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I could have sworn I posted on this one the other night when I first read it. You are so good at free verse! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very, very nice. JL  |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
thanks to all who stopped by....appreciating your kindness to my rambles.... ~~ And so it those we live with |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
box of night--closed a never stirred lake to press against its cheek a moment slow taken I imagine being alone stretched across the skin of rivers a drop of dew through glass the hands of trees, of green -- even fall like memory between storms I lay waiting, listening -- I pray for the dream to remember: the moment green (for the sea) touched blue (for the sky) around such edges of evenings where the sky dances ~ I must mention we are made of fragments we drift -- leave imprints-- walk the journey -- trying to touch it all on silver wings we try to touch the rivers bend the season of air between palm and prayer the press of body between grain and sand --- ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ in you, in me laced with remnant stars when I touched your hands to the grace of clay having lost my soul ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I should have just copied the whole poem, each magnificent word belongs the next... this is soooo hauntingly lovely... and this.... we try to touch the rivers bend the season of air between palm and prayer and oh yesss...this.... laced with remnant stars when I touched your hands to the grace of clay having lost my soul *sigh* what I wouldnt give for volumes of your work.  |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
JM... thank you...always...hugsss you And so it those we live with |
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sweetberry Member
since 2006-03-29
Posts 125 |
Hey you...I like it...Talented! "A box of night-closed/a never stirred lake" |
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