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playing.with.crayons
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0 posted 2006-03-30 05:37 AM


She sits alone.
I don't now
whether it's blood or tears she cries

It looks as though
her heart is breaking
a thousand times

Cause the record's stuck on "loop"

I sit, alone
wondering
and trying to make it better
with words.

Lines on a paper,
sound waves in the air.
Seems stupid really.

I trace a line across my chest,
used my crayolas first.
And I wonder.

Next came the big guns

I hold my breath
and my head pounds.

My heart is in my hands, love,
and I'm giving it to you.

farewell the ash-tray girl

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2006-03-30 05:39 AM


wow! fantastic write I can sure relate to!
playing.with.crayons
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2 posted 2006-03-31 01:37 AM


I wrote it for my friend who's suffering from depression and the like. Bad stuff. But she's gonna win.
thanks for reading xx

Ceinwyn
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3 posted 2006-04-01 10:55 AM


I know these words all too well myself.  Depression has brought me down to my lowest point and I know some people who've gone lower.  It is a battle we can win, if we choose.  And I'm glad to see that you have faith in your friend.  They are very fortunate to have you by their side.  Most people would give up, but you know what I say to those types of people, they weren't worth my time and they're weak.  

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

WindWalker
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4 posted 2006-04-02 01:40 AM


I can relate to this as well. This is a  fantastic poem!
miscellanea
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5 posted 2006-04-02 03:16 AM


your crayolas sketch such gentle and supportive love;  enjoyed this a bunch!

miscellanea

playing.with.crayons
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6 posted 2006-04-03 06:52 AM


Sometimes it's not a choice to give up.
thank you for all your lovely comments. xx

farewell the ash-tray girl

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