Open Poetry #37 |
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IntoTheRain Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 51Westwood, CA |
All at once From the center of my life The landscape is assembling The love of form, a love of endings Deep within A great fountain, deepest blue An imperceptible tide Shadows on midnight waters She sits beneath the willow The verdant swaying A tent of silence One heart caught amidst the vales The blossoms shatter They seem to float Above the sea of bright grass A murmur, like wings in the dark You are everywhere Like the wind, passing and scattering A thousand fragments Of new beginnings ~~~~ im interested to see what people get from this.. thanks in advance for any feedback |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
this isn very deep very touching, you have a great mind. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I see the greatness of mankind in this, being told by nature...what we are, what we could be...and yet, the new beginnings are a constant reminder of the wealth of tides, even though shadows lerk, their voice grows distance, as you realize, you are connected, one with all...? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"The blossoms shatter They seem to float Above the sea of bright grass A murmur, like wings in the dark You are everywhere Like the wind, passing and scattering A thousand fragments Of new beginnings" A most beautiful write.. so much enjoyed, especially the last stanza. Well done! Hugs~Nancy ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I was moved to whisper your delicate words. Lee J's reply eloquently expresses my own perceptions of your lovely poem. EA |
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