Open Poetry #37 |
Dancing In The Snow |
soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Dancing In The Snow Trying to love again is like dancing in the snow slippery ice, my tears in the cold and I wanna throw my arms around the world so I can embrace every pretty girl close to my skin, don't be shy, come on in my heart's so big you can fit Texas right in so find your place and dry my face I've been watering feelings to grow desperately dancing in the snow waiting for spring waiting for anything to call real And I should know by now that no matter how hard I search this town you're not here you're not anywhere I need you, ooh to come around And I've been shivering in the snow my pulse is racing for the a chance to go into the atmosphere but I can still smell your hair and it sends me crashing to the ground Trying to spike the vein is like aching to feel numb love's vacancy, why am I so dumb? To let it all explode like a hand grenade I can't swim through emotions so I wade close off my soul, changed my mind, keep out my heart's shrinking, I'm dying without a doubt so keep your distance nothing's making sense in all this world, a deep blue undertow desperately dancing in the snow waiting to be loved I've waited long enough I need to feel I don't understand at all the hurt I feel when you don't call 'cause a smile is just a curve of the lips and my frown I carve into the curve of her hips the likeness is so right on, it's killing me you should be thrilling me but now my love has so far to go all I can do, baby, is keep dancing in the snow all I can do, baby, is keep on dancing to know someone feels the way I do, from there I can grow and spring will free my soul till then you can find me here, dancing in the snow, oh... 'Cause I've got nowhere else to go. "I'm the soul drifter, and I'm out of this town, ain't no use hangin' round, you see" -- Lindsey Buckingham, 'Soul Drifter' |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
Daaamn, if I had your natural beat AND poetic talent, I would pretty much rule the world. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
exhale's comment is right on, this was exceptional writing. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent...this needs to be put to music! Hugs~Nancy ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
yesssssssssss this is a song you know... and it's AMAZING! I'm keeping this |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I enjoyed this post very much, especially this part, it seems familiar to me "'cause a smile is just a curve of the lips and my frown I carve into the curve of her hips the likeness is so right on, it's killing me you should be thrilling me" Nicely done. seek the flame within yourself |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Trying to love again is like dancing in the snow slippery ice, ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Cutting the chill is not an easy thing to do. I really love your honest approach!! It's always a pleasure to read your work, soul drifter~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I can't swim through emotions so I wade close off my soul, changed my mind, keep out my heart's shrinking, so true, would nake a beautiful song~~ M |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I love the dance....tis beautiful, in the snow.... And so it those we live with |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
Ouch, but I know what you mean. Nice Write! |
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