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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2006-03-19 08:39 PM

She came
from the haze that cloaked the
curves of sheer.

Catching my breath, calming the
tremor of my hands and wiping
the blur from eyes wide, staring
as a mouth caught flies.

A dream perhaps, one played over
and again, as the record skipped
in an endless circle...and then.

The touch, light upon the arch of
one’s back...tracing curves around
minute droplets of sweat....a sultry
night....slowly cooling, slowly
waning as dawn awaits.

And now, even now, after the sun
has sought the eye, touched the
end of a sleeping arm...rustling
the murmur...before the sigh and
tear that followed....again, again.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2006-03-19 08:43 PM

And now, even now, after the sun
has sought the eye, touched the
end of a sleeping arm...rustling

~*~

So, where? Where is the novel
that these tenders belong?

It is time, Sir.

It is time.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2006-03-19 08:58 PM

Barry..listen to Karilea.
She is right you know.
The time is now.

Love this piece sooo much!

Hugs~Nancy

~ Trace my body with your words,
in doing so, you touch my heart ~

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

3 posted 2006-03-20 03:25 PM

"She came
from the haze that cloaked the
curves of sheer."

Oh my... it's lines like these that leave me shaking my head in wonder.

WindWalker
Senior Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 1218

4 posted 2006-03-21 10:12 AM

This is very good! And I like the imagery in this poem!

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

5 posted 2006-03-21 10:42 AM

Powerfully written Barry. And I agree a novel is within your grasp.

believe in what your heart feels...

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

6 posted 2006-03-21 11:56 AM

A dream perhaps, one played over
and again, as the record skipped
in an endless circle...and then.

The touch, light upon the arch of
one’s back...tracing curves around
minute droplets of sweat....a sultry
night....slowly cooling, slowly
waning as dawn awaits.

And now, even now, after the sun
has sought the eye, touched the
end of a sleeping arm...rustling
the murmur...before the sigh and
tear that followed....again, again.

perfection...bittersweet moments
bending us to our knees, so good

and your words, outstanding!

Goldenrose
Member Elite

since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

7 posted 2006-03-21 01:10 PM

The words tangle you in the mind, and you come to the end like rising from a dream you dont want to end..fine writing...enjoyed so much..thanks..

Goldenrose.

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