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in darkness, all sidewalks ache
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in darkness, all sidewalks ache |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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First -- abandon style so many dreams coming up with the rising storm the meeting of crossing waters when all ash is washed away the space is open pray for me in soft spoken words: give a little so you can see the ocean -- where there is horizon there is sky there are no borders when the cold wind/s blow between earth and first winter until we tear the memories and merge with what remains the touch of season and time changing I am made of hollow shapes and often reminded that angels soar but seldom walk I will forget my palms are pressed and my lips dry in moments here and past the longer view does not matter, if you find yourself weeping through shadows waiting for sparrows to edge the gold in release I often ask how do I understand such beauty and question such fear in darkness, all sidewalks ache waiting for rain to wash away the chalk ~~**~~ And so it those we live with and should know who elude us But we can still love them we can love completely without complete understanding |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
You're poetry ever so touches me like you are in tune with my universe. Thank you for such a nice write. Huggs Kim |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I am made of hollow shapes Grrrrrrrrrr.......I NEED to have come up with this line! ....sigh....what can ya expect, from someone whose every poem is a lesson in how to write....but I still need to have thought up that line! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"there are no borders when the cold wind/s blow between earth and first winter until we tear the memories and merge with what remains" oh, I am feeling this. It's good to read you again, dear Greeneyes. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"weeping through shadows waiting for sparrows" Sigh... I can't find the words to do this poem justice Greeneyes. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"hollow shapes" - yes, indeed, and life fills and moulds them until we know what we need to know. An amazing and insightful write! Thank you! Helen |
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wounded eagle New Member
since 2005-12-24
Posts 5 |
I really enjoyed reading your poem. I will have to look for more of your work. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"there are no borders when the cold wind/s blow between earth and first winter" It is good to remember this, now and all the time. Thanks Lauren!  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Wow. Very nice!! JL  |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
"the longer view does not matter, if you find yourself weeping through shadows waiting for sparrows to edge the gold in release" Lauren, this is just amazingly beautiful..... all the poem, not just that part. Enjoyed reading you, my friend. Hugs, Ethel |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
waiting for rain to wash away the chalk so much said in so little words M |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
in darkness, all sidewalks ache waiting for rain to wash away the chalk ....airashii! (means lovely in Japanese...I couldn't find the right words in English for these lines...the language just ain't pretty enough.) "I'm the soul drifter, and I'm out of this town, ain't no use hangin' round, you see" -- Lindsey Buckingham, 'Soul Drifter' |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Lauren...Pure raw poetry. Very much enjoyed and will read many time over...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Your poetry (I have only come across 2 of your poems so far, but will be looking for more) is the definition of beauty in its purest form. I will be re-reading very many times. Thank you for your exquisite creation. I wrapped myself up in it, and don't want to leave it. - Owl |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I am made of hollow shapes and am often reminded that angels soar but seldom walk Indeed  sis...they do soar   Lady ~L~incredible write from such a beautiful soul..HUGS YOU seek the flame within yourself and let your soul be cleansed by the fire of love. Axel Ekenstierna |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
beautiful.......so deep, so layered, this is one to reread many times |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
hey all thanks so much for all your words....love to all.... And so it those we live with |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
pray for me in soft spoken words: give a little so you can see the ocean -- where there is horizon there is sky there are no borders when the cold wind/s blow between earth and first winter until we tear the memories and merge with what remains the touch of season and time changing I am made of hollow shapes and often reminded that angels soar but seldom walk ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ just wanted to touch this...even if I am a tardy moth  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
there are no borders when the cold wind/s blow between earth and first winter until we tear the memories and merge with what remains the touch of season and time changing I am made of hollow shapes and often reminded that angels soar but seldom walk you are a poet with great eyes, green, green, green....both metaphorically and physically...wow...!!!! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I will forget my palms are pressed and my lips dry in moments here and past the longer view does not matter, if you find yourself weeping through shadows waiting for sparrows to edge the gold in release ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ You leave the sidewalks glistening, green beauty~ |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Beautiful in every way Greeneyes! :-) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful this.. beautiful you.. Love ya lady~ ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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Androgynous Member
since 2006-04-08
Posts 71 |
"where there is horizon there is sky" Well put, and so very true Love |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
I see, I feel, I ache .... .. I am whole. CT |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
you make words fat with meaning. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
cool, cool - LOVE the title!  |
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