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Her Loss (for lack of a better one)
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Her Loss (for lack of a better one) |
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Ringo 
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes 
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I looked out the window Watched her walk into the past Thinking of how life Passed me by Never without a second glance She wanted more than I could give Never accepting The things I kept inside for her Now, as I lay here Alone I still see her face Laughing at me At what she felt I had become Without her to raise me into the light She never saw the life inside Only the lies in her mind So, I roll out of bed Place my feet on the floor Firmly With the conviction of certainty I begin the thousand miles With the first step towards my success If anyone can come up with a better title, I would love you forever and promise to be your slave... as long as I didn't have to do anything. 
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
title seems fitting nice write  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Using your own words, "The First Step" would, in my mind, make for a wonderfully positive title for your poem!   Linda |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I agree with Linda. Excellent write. I enjoyed it. |
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