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0 posted 2006-01-14 05:09 AM


             ... from one side...
                 ... to ...          ... the other ....


... voices ...


... we can't hear what they're saying ...
         ... what they want ...
                         ... what ...


        ... with an emptiness that breeds lonliness ...
     ... these are our only thoughts ...
                    ... reach out ...


... not there ...
            ... you never were ...

...

                  ... laughter ...
... kontakt? ...

              ... nobody's there ...

... conpiracies of the inner-mind ...
            ... climbing the emotions of a fool ...

           ... only the most logical of things exist ...
    ... i turn to you...


... nobody's there ...

© Copyright 2006 Alex-lee Hryhorczuk - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2006-01-14 05:26 AM


Its really a complex style i wouldn't be able to write like that i perfer stanza's its more like your in the middle and from your head you're hearing a thousand voices all differently speaking

Hello...
        ...i'm here...
                       ...been there before..
different thoughts


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2 posted 2006-01-14 06:19 AM


Thanks! Although...it's not TOO complex :P
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3 posted 2006-01-14 03:52 PM


I love how much you've grown since Teen days

c'mere

and then He created the horse...

Kethry
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4 posted 2006-01-14 04:48 PM


I'd say this has complex images but a simple form. Well done with this, it gives the impression of voices in your head and conversations by one held out loud.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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5 posted 2006-03-30 11:52 PM



*smiling and waving*

It's good to see you here, Alex...

and this?...

"... i turn to you...


... nobody's there ... "


I know this place well...

Enjoyed the read...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

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